| "Control" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: shivalatina [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2006 14:24 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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This had me blinking away tears throughout most of this fic. Very nice job.
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Reviewed By: lee-lee On: May 26, 2004 01:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really loved the story. You should write more. Your a good writer. I also liked how u expressed vegeta's feelings for Goku. It was soooo cute.
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Reviewed By: Goku's Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2003 17:19 CST
Comment/Review:
i really like this story. it was a great read!! i love yaoi.
i have only just a few minor things that made it slightly hard to read. sometimes it would say "you" and it should have been "him" that is about all i have to complain about.
Great job!!
i will be reading the next part of this later. thank you for sharing your story! |
Reviewed By: Basilisk_Writer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2002 11:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I didn't really like how segmented the story was in the beginning, but I think it really captured extreme emotion, but it also explained itself after a little while. It's been a long while since I've actually felt what the charachters of fanfiction, movies, novels etc, have felt. You did a wonderful job, I can't find much wrong with it.
~the basilisk writer, Em |
Reviewed By: Spencers13 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2002 10:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story has touched me so much. I just don't understand, so I'm gonna try and break it down for myself as well as you as I review. It was so rawly emotional, it made my hands sweat. I almost cried for Vegeta when Goku kept leaving him time and time again. My heart broke with his as Goku left for the last time with Shenlong. And then he finally came back and I was so happy! And now they're in heaven together! *tears well up* It's just so perfect an ending! This was such a beautfiul story and I love the way you wrote it. After you explained that it was a dream the whole time at the end, I understood the choppiness of it and the dream-like white mist. Simply amazing style. You wrote it very well, but your spelling and grammer and just a few aesthetic things with dashes and underscores and other such little things were a little choppy, so I gave you a 7 for that. Don't worry though, everything else... *kisses fingers and raises them in a salute* Marvelous. Simply marvelous. (So great in fact that I copied your story to my computer so I can read it over as much as I want.) ^_^ Thank you for this story, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! Take care! |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2002 14:46 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good fic it really tells how vegea feels for Goku loved it. I like your stuff. |
Reviewed By: Lully On: October 25, 2002 23:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
I've reviewed this too! Thank you for writing this and the continuation! I am always on the lookout for more from you!
I think you really managed to capture the desperation in their reunion!
*cheers* |
Reviewed By: Rae George [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2002 09:37 CDT
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Please rate this NC-17. It is not a PG fic. It should be rated correctly. |
Reviewed By: Vege_Chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2002 22:58 CST
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SWEEEEET.... I already left my lengthy comment on "Ten No Ai" God, I loved the scene where Vegeta sees Goku for the first time in 60 years... I loved it!! ^_____^ *melts into a love sick puddle* |
