"Flawless" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: ItsSadYouSuck [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2004 14:59 CDT Comment/Review: I loved it!
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Reviewed By: Robofetus0 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2003 10:01 CDT Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Comment/Review: This would've been a good PWP, but you ought to work on some of the grammar and spelling errors. You confused a lot of homonyms, and had several run-on sentences and a great deal of cliched language. Also, everything moved very quickly--there wasn't much of a conflict or resolution to speak of. If you could just add detail to your fic, looking closely at your word choice and using more vivid descriptions rather than generic romantic/erotic cliches, this fic would be a lot more enjoyable to read. I agree with Mentantië that you would benefit very much from the help of a beta reader. |
Reviewed By: Mentantië [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2003 13:15 CDT Comment/Review: It's great and such, but I feel like it's a bit of a cliche, and you turn around the meaning of the words 'their' and 'there'. Maybe you could let someone beta your fic before finally posting it, so that most of the mistakes are out of it. The fic for the rest is great ^^ |
Reviewed By: Yume Maxwell-Yuy [MediaMiner Member] On: January 03, 2003 06:12 CST Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: Cutness. I loved this fic, you did a fantastic job of it and I can't believe that no one has reviewed this. Hmmmmmmm. I love the series and I sooooo believe that Tsuzuki/Hisoka is the main romance pairing. they are just sooooooo cute together. well. keep up the good work, and I hope to see some more fics written by you soon. Ja ne!!!!!!!! |