| "Bad Ass:The series(in story)" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Nite Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2002 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YAY! I luv tis so far! Keep going! Pweeeeezzz! |
Reviewed By: Kenny On: November 02, 2002 01:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm gonna give you some advice, Sammy-Puff.
1.) Read over it before you post! Make spelling and grammar corrections before you post it.
2.) You jump from subject to subject a little too often. Make it flow smoothly, and not making us read, then have to think about what we already read and read on somemore.
3.) Details and a plan. This is nitt-picky I know, but it's important.
Sarin is obviously very smart and powerful if she has killed so many and isn't getting caught by police. So how can Tech and Sam just walk into her base with absolutely no trouble? You'd think there would be cameras and spies and booby-traps all over the place! You can't skip out on such large details. But I can fully understand what's going on and the story, and I like it!
Keep up the good work! |
Reviewed By: Kenny On: November 02, 2002 00:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good juob Sammy-Puff, I want to see more of this!
More stories! MORE. |
Reviewed By: Clarissa [MediaMiner Member] On: November 01, 2002 23:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
XDDDDDDDDDDDDDD Go Sam! *waves a GO SAM flag* |
