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| "Ranma's Sexual Nightmare" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Title: Hmm
Reviewed By: Krista [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2005 17:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Even though I don't normally enjoy girl-on-girl fanfics, I do enjoy your writing style. part of the reason that this fic isn't quite as strong as your other is that, in the end, Ranma was upset with Akane. This makes Akane no better than a rapist, marriage or no. If you had ended the fic with Ranma returning the favor, or at least demonstrated a change in his attitude, then the story would have projected the naughty playfullness you desired. However, the stuff I am pointing out requires minimum plot editing. You have good, solid prose and a vivid imagination. ;)
| Reviewed By: DBZ Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: March 01, 2004 16:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Lemon! I'm not a Yaoi/Yuri fan at all, but since Ranma IS originally a guy, I thought it was okay. Keep writing!
| Reviewed By: darkrider852 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2003 14:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
eh.... dont be so hard on your self. you wrote it and got it here. thats all. i give it two thumbs up and a good job. remember, heroes are hereoes, but legends never die. follow your heart kid. |
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