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| "First Person Plural" Reviews/Comments [ 35 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] | Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2003 00:56 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like. Interesting, personalities. makes a lot of sense if you think about it. Duo's had a major stressful childlife and he sure's hell switches personalities often. Though I always considered him more manic-depressive myself. | Reviewed By: Dark Tenchi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2003 21:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really loving this and i do truly hope you continue writing it *chibi eyes* pweeeeeaaaaassssseeeeeee? I'll love you forever | Reviewed By: Dark Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: November 02, 2002 10:27 CST
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DUDE! makes me wonder if any one i know is has MPD. love the story btw. its really good and is i ever have to do a project on MPD i know who to ask.
nedd more ASAP,
~*~Dark Princess~*~ | Reviewed By: Gemini Maxwell On: September 30, 2002 18:35 CDT
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Hey, I already reviewed this yesterday. I just thought I'd tell you I spent the whole day thinking about this fic. I told everyone I saw to read it, even people I dont know. (I'm serious, I did.) This is the best fan fiction I've ever read, and Ive been reading/writing for a long time, over 3 years. It really is amazing! You've done a great job, and I'm just about to read it again! UPDATE SOON OR I WILL SICK MY PENGUINS ON YOU! lol not really. If only I had killer penguins! Anyway, you are amazing, and I would pay for a book written like this. I've payed for books written worse then this. You are a ridiculously good author. Kudos to you! ::clap clap clap:: | Reviewed By: Gemini Maxwell On: September 29, 2002 21:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I wanted to give you an originality rating of 11, but they didnt make it. This story is so great! One of my closest friends has Multiple Personality Disorder, so it really means a lot to me that you know so much about it and took the time to write a story. Plus, I love 1+2, and you keep Duo-baby and Heero in character really well! UPDATE SOON! Love the story! | Reviewed By: janine On: August 06, 2002 16:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The overall story was on a topic that very few can continue along. I found that once I started reading, it was annoying if I was interupted by anyone/thing. I wanted to finish the fic. The D.I.D. and M.O.D. was a very tough subject to get across to the reader, and I found that this writer did infact do so with panache, at one time I found myself skipping a few paragraphes only to go back and read them all. I would be very happy to purchase this if it was in paper or hardback.
I gave low scorings for spelling and grammer because it didn't really matter to me how it was spelt, I just found I couldn't stop reading... Also low scoring for enjoyment but not because I didn't enjoy it, infact I did so, but when reading this I couldn't really give a damn, I just wanted to continue reading...]*evil grin* | Reviewed By: duosan On: June 20, 2002 11:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh my god... I loved this story. I don't think I've ever seen anything like it before. I really enjoyed this story. You did such great work with the seperate entities. It must have been extremely difficult. Congrats on a job well done! | Reviewed By: Tritorella On: June 07, 2002 04:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The idea of this story is novel, and well executed. It explores a mental illness about which most of us know nothing, in a believable and well-characterised way. All the pilots are well-done, and their reactions are interesting and moving. I did feel that there was a slightly too abrupt about face with Heero, but it is explained later in a way which makes sense. Brava. | Reviewed By: motionblur [MediaMiner Member] On: July 25, 2002 01:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've done a brilliant job with what you've undertaken, quite frankly. The portrayal of MPD is taut, serious, and believable. I learned some things I did not know. ^_~ Your writing style was clear and to the point, without the unnecessary embellishments so many GW fic writers are so fond of. You weren't afraid to create awkward moments for your characters when those awkward moments were required. Here is what I think you can improve upon. Duo (and his crew) were all vividly fleshed out, and I would have loved to see some of that in Heero. You didn't use the other Gundam pilots very much, which is okay, but I didn't get a sense of Heero at all. His actions from start to finish were a mystery to me. Perhaps you wanted it to come across that way, as likely Duo didn't understand why Heero was doing what he was either, but sometimes you slipped into Heero's POV, and you could have done some explanation then. Heero seemed more like a blank slate you were using to lever your story and I didn't see much tribute to the canon Heero. What frustrated me was his about face with "I want normal." It came out of the blue to me. Wasn't expecting it, and it left me with a strangely sour feel because the vague sketches of Heero you'd given us wouldn't, I thought, act like that. That's my main problem with this story: the lack of real character development on Heero's part. However, what you set to show with Duo, you did brilliantly, and kudos on a truly heart-tugging fic. I'll be reading the sequel now and hoping that some things are explained on Heero's part that weren't before. My gut feeling for this fic is that I love it, and that you are very brave for choosing this subject to tackle, and very talented for handling it so beautifully. ^_^ | Reviewed By: Ashley Akaihi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2002 03:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know, i really just have to agree with alot of these people here. Especially Koshiroryuu, the anonomous, and Koyote19. I loved FPP.....and hated it. I too felt as though i missed a chapter and probably had a longing for a happier ending. Duos just been through so much shit just to be treated like _that_. = ( It just didn't seem right. On the other hand, i thought you had a lovely writing style that seemed to suck me in and i greatly await a happier sequel. | Reviewed By: Koyote19 On: December 29, 2001 22:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't even know if I have the words to say what I felt reading this fic...I loved it, and hated the end...probably because something similar happened to me. I couldn't stop reading though. It's always interesting to see this situation from someone else's eyes, instead of just from the inside. You did a good job with this. so much of this echos my own experiences that it's scary sometimes, which may account for part of why I was so caught up in the story. I will hope for a sequel, so that I can see where you take it next. Again, good job with handling the switching of personalities, and the technical explanations. I've tried to explain to others sometimes what it feels like to shift... and my friends have tried to explain what they see when I do, and I have to say that you nailed it with this fic. Well done. | Reviewed By: koshiroryuu [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2001 13:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Definitely one of the single most original fics I've ever read, and I thought the overall voice of it was absolutely brilliant. I was very impressed with how each personality really did come off as its own person, too. Very, very well done. Wow.
The switching between first and third person was usually handled beautifully, too, giving the overall impression that it was always in first person, except that the person in question wasn't always necessarily there, which was obviously kinda the point. :)
There were a couple of instances where that was kinda thrown, though, when something was written in the third person that gave an insight into Heero's thoughts or something, which was kinda jarring, but it didn't happen all that much at all and was pretty easy to overlook in the grand scheme of things. The verb tense had a tendency to vary, too, and a couple of other little grammar things, maybe, but it just needs an editor to catch those kinds of things, really. (I'd be happy to help, if you want...)
The ending was a bit of a shock, though; it kinda made me feel like I'd missed a chapter somewhere or something. Yeah, it's probably partially because I'm just a sucker for happy endings and all, but it would've been easier on me if I'd seen it coming at all from Heero's previous behavior. It felt like it was working its way to one ending but ended up with another. Maybe if you dropped a few more hints or something, or led up to it a bit more gradually? I guess it just kinda didn't sit right.
Also, tiny pet peeve, sorry, but if his therapist can prescribe meds then she's a psychiatrist, not a psychologist. A psychologist can have a PhD and therefore be a doctor, but only an actual medical doctor can prescribe medications, and if she has an MD then she's a psychiatrist. (Clearly, this is just my own neurosis coming out here, but still... *g*)
Anyway, more than you probably wanted, but I know that, as a writer, I always feel better with more rather than less, so I figured, hey, what the heck, right? :)
So, like I said, totally brilliant, very very impressive, and I *totally* wish I could ever manage to write this well myself. :) Absolutely wonderful. This is the first of your fics that I've read, and I totally want to read more! Like, right now! Right this second! (I'm such a fic addict... Sigh...)
Keep up the great work! | Reviewed By: Lady Jade [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2001 01:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I Love it all! one of the best fics i've ever read! extremely original, well thought out, with an interesting plot. the ending seemed slightly out of corrospondence with the fic( but thats probably just because i'm a sap for happy endings and have been reading numerous deathfics lately, and needed some fluff) but other that, it was absolutly perfect. | Reviewed By: Sony_Mouse On: September 08, 2001 20:27 CDT
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OKay, it's been awhile since I've read a fic this well written. You really know what you're doing. I'm very impressed by your work and you have me compeletely suckered in. I must read more, please write more as soon as you can, this story is too good to waste | Reviewed By: Kekepania On: September 09, 2001 11:14 CDT
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WOOOW! I like a lot. Update as quickly as you can. The way you put it together is great. It's like, I want all the "personalities" and such to go away for Duo, but then all the personalities are like little bitty humans. Wow, that sounded bizarre. But keep it up! | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 › » ] |
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