| "Dance Under a Dark Moon" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: Silver Raven On: September 03, 2003 01:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are a wonderful writer that knows what you are doing and your love for these characters and their relationship really show. You weave haunting but lovely images with your words, that exude the same dark and sensuous atmosphere of Tokyo Babylon and X. You also describe the thoughts and emotions of Subaru and Seishirou with honesty and understaning, which honour the original series and its creators.
Thanks for your story. |
Reviewed By: maladyrancor [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2003 23:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whimsical and hauting, this story captures the sensitive and tenuous relationship of Suburu / Seishiro in a such a lyrical way! You are truly an amazing writer to be able to craft such an original, painful, and genuine story. The ending, the lush descriptions, the sensuous drama...it was amazing.
I do hope that you continue to write in the future - and I know my review comes late, but just keep in mind, how great you are! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Nkoah [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2003 02:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is so incredibly beautiful...the way you two write is AMAZING. It was just so sad...I nearly cried! So incredible...I just want Seishirou to come running back to Subaru and tell him he loves him and -- ARGH!!! So sad!! ^-^
Keep it up -- you two have some serious talent.
~Nkoah~ (NkoahValatia@hotmail.com) |
Reviewed By: linz On: May 11, 2003 06:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really enjoyed this fic .... and i have read one where their looked in a room magically sealles and told to work it out... it was verry enjoyable at http://doki3.net/void/index.htm it's called angelic intervention..but you've probably already read it |
Reviewed By: Odile On: February 17, 2003 18:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked the fluidity of the writing. The past/present comparisons were very well done and the open sybolism you used for their relationship was really well done. I also really liked the differences in tone between the first and second chapter. You could definitely feel the change in atmosphere from the past to the present. Very well written. Keep up the great work. |
Reviewed By: halowing4 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2003 23:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What a wonderful,sweet,yet sad story. You caught perfectly the innocence and lost innocence between the two time periods. I hope you write more on Ss and Sb's tortured relationship. |
Reviewed By: Majinkarp On: December 02, 2002 04:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great work with the contrasts between the two different periods of time. You really captured the sweetness and awkwardness of their relationship in TB but with the sinister overtones as well. It's clear that you know the series well, and you made sure the story really "meshed" with them. I love symbolism because it allows you to show instead of just telling, so I thought the waltz and clothing and the changes in the illusions were excellent touches, and they worked really well. As for characterization, Seishirou's "exit" was an appropriate twist, which set this story on the course for one of its most outstanding features, its ending (good summation). I also like how you gave the older Subaru a little credit and didn't turn him into a total wuss; on the other hand, I'm not quite sure that as a 25-year-old he would be so ignorant as to what sex entails, as inexperienced as he might be in the act itself. Still, that's just minor...Well, if you'd like to contact me or wish for me to elaborate on my thoughts, you can reach me at jms344@nyu.edu . Thank you for the truly enjoyable story! |
Reviewed By: clairekygal [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2002 14:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! This was such a wonderful fic! Definitely one of the best I've ever read--I certainly don't give out a score of perfect tens for just anyone! Please, please, consider writing a sequal, or at least adding another chapter! I desperately want to know what happens next with Subaru-kun and Seishirou-san! They just have such a deep, tormented, yet passionate bond between them--and you captured that perfectly in your fic! Thanks so much for posting it for all of us to enjoy! ^__^ |
