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Reviewed By: duos_bunny On: April 13, 2003 16:20 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
bunny: WHY!? did u stop there!?
yami bunny: i know! it was getting really good!
bunny:even though im the innocent girl type i want more of this fic!i mean looks at your reviews!
Yami bunny:she has a point.
bunny: well toodles 4 now but WRITE MORE!! THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ALL OF US! *Points 2 all the reviewers and yami bunny who r yelling4 more*
*reviewers*: WE WANT MORE! WE WANT MORE!*hold up signs*
well write more soon *puppy eyes*
~bunny and yami bunny~ |
Reviewed By: Jam ( to family) Dilan ( friends) On: April 10, 2003 18:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
u started out great, keep writing like this and I will visit every fic u writr!! |
Reviewed By: yami_chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 09, 2003 15:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
**CLAPS** Yatta! I await more ^___^ |
Reviewed By: Laura On: April 08, 2003 20:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I want more!!!! Very well written! Its rare to see a NCS fic where Yami is the seme! Poor Yugi!!! Please write more! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: dragonheart287 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2003 13:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
Awwwwww. Poor Yugi. |
Reviewed By: Dryad Chick [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 19:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
What the crap? Where is my review? If I offended you because I gave a few pointers it doesn't mean that you should just delete my review. I liked your fic, jeez. |
Reviewed By: Fire Cat On: April 05, 2003 23:29 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor little yugi ::tear:: BAD yami BAD! this is a good rape fic. . . keep it up |
Reviewed By: YamiNoKokoro On: April 05, 2003 16:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This, I have to say was very well done. :) I like your idea of a Y/Y yaoi rape fic, for you are correct about there not being many of those. (alhtough I read a fic that was even more unheard of one time,,of YUGI raping Jounochi..but that is besides the point) I like your descrpitions, and your style. This was a very good read. All the lemoy flavor that a girl could want! :) Is there gonna ever be more? |
Reviewed By: Katmon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 05, 2003 00:29 CST
Comment/Review:
That was GREAT!!! {I would have enjoyed it even more if I weren't arguing with this cold!!! *Grrr...*}
Well, I can't wait for more!!
=^.^= |
Reviewed By: ELIZA On: April 04, 2003 23:56 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I WANT MORE CHAPTERS PLEAAASSSSSSSSSEEEEEE!!!!!!!
THAT WAS GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!^_^ |
Reviewed By: Nelly On: April 04, 2003 18:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was good!! There aren't many Yami/ Yugi rapes...please update! |
Reviewed By: Dryad Chick [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 16:09 CST
Comment/Review:
Wow. That was intense O.o *sucking whip cream form the can* sooo, it's all very interesting and naughty, yes? ^.^ oh ho ho.
Anywho, it seems pretty good so far, just some friendly suggestions:
When you have dialogue, you should space it out. It makes the story flow better, allows dramatic scenes to be more dramatic, and is easier to read. ^-^ All ya have to do is hit enter, then tab, when you have a new piece of dialogue.
Also, the ~*~ things broke up the story. Since you are writing in third person, these separations aren't really neccesary, because you aren't looking straight through a certain character's eyes. Just take those out, and it will make a smoother read.
There were a few spelling errors, such as realising is realizing. There weren't too many, though ^.^;; I've seen some stories...oh god...do people just sleep through school? I mean, gawd! *sleeps during school too, just trying to look good ^.^;;*
YAY! Write more! *swirly thumb* ;_; but poor Yuugi-chan! Although Yami IS pretty evil...I mean...in the manga...he's frickin evil...heheheheheheheeheheh once again write or post or whatever more soon!
|DCHK| |
Reviewed By: Dragondreamer Yami Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 07:03 CST
Comment/Review:
DON'T LEAVE IT THERE!! EEPPP!!! UPDATE!! UPDATE!! |
Reviewed By: I love Yugi and Davis [MediaMiner Member] On: March 07, 2003 14:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story but.... I WANT MORE!!! I want 2 find out wat Yami does. Will Yugi ever 4give him? And there r Yami/Yugi rape one. I no cuz I've read em but urs is by far the best so far |
Reviewed By: My Own Shukuun [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2003 18:13 CST
Comment/Review:
Great story but... Where's the rest?This story is screaming to be finished! Hear it?
Story: FINISH ME!! FINISH ME!!!
see? please fulfill this poor deprived story it's only wish!! |
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