| "The Casino" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: pretty good
Reviewed By: State spelling champion On: February 22, 2005 22:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought it was good, but I gave it a bad grammar rating because you are supposed to make a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
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Reviewed By: jetski363 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 12, 2003 08:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good but would have been better if it had paragraphs. You could have made it clearer who was speaking. |
Reviewed By: Spencerblaze [MediaMiner Member] On: November 26, 2002 21:03 CST
Comment/Review:
well, its pretty good, and really funny, but my mum would kill me if she saw me reading chapter 3!!! ahh! |
Reviewed By: ravenclawyoshi [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2002 11:29 CST
Comment/Review:
How cute! I was so pleased to find a Hamtaro fanfic!! I just LOVE Oxnard!! Poor guy lost his seed! Good job! |
Reviewed By: mcamino On: November 13, 2002 21:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hamha! I just finished this story and i figured i would comment on it. It has a interesting plot line about the casino and boss and stan. And NEW Hamtaro fanfics are ALWAYS GREAT (I am a huge hamtaro fan) and i like the way you write, but it is too short. The story is too short, too "boxy". I think you should concertrate on making the chapters much longer, and more descriptive. So to sum it all up, GREAT STORY LINE, AND YOU SHOW PLENTY OF PROMISE AS A GOOD WRITER (FOR HAMTARO) just make them a bitlonger and more descriptive like use more conversations between the ham hams :) but GREAT JOB seriously great job |
