| "A Tale of Mirai" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Title: A Tale Of Mirai
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2005 22:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapter?
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Title: A Tale Of Mirai
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2005 19:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: A Tale Of Mirai
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: April 15, 2005 21:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters? Can you write this story on www.adultfanfiction.net
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Reviewed By: v son sayain On: May 14, 2003 16:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
interesting. i find the plot line very deep |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2002 23:35 CST
Comment/Review:
Whoaaa...
That's deep!!
I can't wait to see what happens next!!! This is a great story! I hope that everything works out in the end...I hope it's a happy ending, eventually!
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
Reviewed By: Bloody_X [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2002 09:53 CST
Comment/Review:
Please continue, it's starting to get exciting!
UUUHH!!! I can't wait! Oh no, I'm getting hyper....*runs around in circles after the air* |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2002 20:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a good story keep it up |
Reviewed By: blitzballbabe [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2002 19:45 CST
Comment/Review:
okay I'm reviewed... gowd... It's sweet. It seemed when Broli raped Pan, she enjoyed it.. too much.. but you act like Pan sooo you would enjoy.. hahaha |
Reviewed By: Who cares? On: December 01, 2002 11:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update soon or i'll die! |
Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2002 00:57 CST
Comment/Review:
^_^ I really like this fic!!!
But just a few words of advice...
-It's "Saiya-Jin", not "Sai-Jin"
-I don't mind it too much that you're making Pan as 1st person point-of-view, but when you make sentences with them talking, you end the line with how the character expressed it.
Example:
"I hate you Trunks!!!"
Pan shouted scornfully.
It should be:
"I hate you Trunks!!!" Pan shouted scornfully.
Make no spaces in between those little things. It's really annoying to read, and that's not even using the fact that it's the wrong way of writing it out.
So far I really like this story. Try not to over-repeat and emphasize on certain things and don't rush the story too much. Make the chapters a little longer, too. I think this is gonna be a really cool fic once you fix a few things here and there, but I'll keep reading it!!! =D Update as soon as ya can!! ^_^
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
Reviewed By: tp fan. On: November 20, 2002 11:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That is a good story. Poor Pan *sigh* I like this continue plz. |
Reviewed By: Bloody_X [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2002 11:48 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Poor Pan!
Can you pleeeeaase update soon!? Not to sound bossy, but its just that when I read a story, its like I'm there myself, and I just want it to continue!!!!!
Please? |
