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| "Cold As Ice" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] | Title: no..sry
Reviewed By: Catie On: June 21, 2005 06:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok I thought it was ok until i saw that bra was a super sayian. BRA NEVER FOUGHT! Vegeta wouldnt let her. Further more she didnt want to so the idea that she would be a supersayian is riduculas. But hey i guess this is a fanfiction...but come on you can only go so far. But whatever this is just my opinion. But anyways i dont like it. Sry!
| Reviewed By: Shu-shang On: September 17, 2004 17:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really can say nothing about this except i like this fic for some reason, i suppoes it's they way you use your characters and the words, your not afraid when it comes to chosing an word for an private part . ^.^, the rap was brutal an really toturues i felt for all of them , and i kept on reading, this is an good fic hope you can make anohter one similar to this one
| Reviewed By: Sophe On: July 23, 2004 01:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this fic. I read it in about 3 hours. Please do a sequel, you have an amazing gift. I hope you'll do a sequel and if you are I can't wait for it. Thank you for writing such a great story.
| Reviewed By: FadingSlowly On: July 12, 2004 21:27 CDT
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That was truly amazing! You captured the emotions perfectly. The only thing wrong with it that I could find was that you had Marron's age wrong. She's only about a year or two younger than Trunks and Goten. (But that's okay. I don't like her, so when she's not in the story very much, it's fine with me!) Other than that, it was fantastic! The way you described them able to feel the bond within their family members was fantastic. I loved it through and through!
| Reviewed By: Abby On: February 12, 2003 21:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a very emotional fic. You did an excellent job making it human and not something terrible and disgusting. Yes the content might have been tragic, but the writing of it was wonderful. Thank you for writing this like you did. | Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2002 19:51 CST
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XD lmao I haven't even started to read it, but I had to review about the part when I was just scrolling down the chapter's titles and summaries and saw:
Oozaru (Chapter 17)
Summary: Duh
XD lmao!!! Am I too easily amused here, or WHAT??? XD *rolls around laughing*
Anywho...I'm gonna read now...Lol, bai!!! ^_^ | Reviewed By: Lots of love but nowhere to put it On: December 06, 2002 18:14 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please do a squel(not sure if spelled write)!!!!!!! *gets down on hand and kness* Please!!!!!! | Reviewed By: Lots of love but nowhere to put it On: November 29, 2002 18:35 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I relly liked your fic. And think you should continue. Please update soon:) | Reviewed By: christabel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2002 22:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW,WOW, I love it. | Reviewed By: Hisaki [MediaMiner Member] On: December 05, 2002 23:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOOOOOVVVVEEED THIS STORY!!!
I say do a sequel, because it was just so incredibly written and great!
Just a few things though:
-Trunks's hair is a light purple/lavander color, not silver
-Videl actually CAN fly
I know you said you were adjusting the ages of the Demi-Saiyans to your liking, but you also said that you never watched DBZ or GT, right? Well just letting you know those little facts, then. Also, I really don't think it's all that necessary that you keep pointing out who the characters are, what roles they play, etc. etc. (Ex: Goku, Goten and Gohan's father...etc. etc.) and all that. After all, this is a DragonballGT FanFic, so the only people who would read it is those who know who the characters are and all already, right? It's just a suggestion...
Even though there was a lot of gore and serious situations, just the whole love-making scenes between Trunks and Pan, Goten and Bra made the whole thing have significance (did I spell that right?), and it was so beautiful. It splits the whole meaning of "sex", and put aside the difference and meaning of both "love-making" and "rape". It really was a great story, and I truely loved it. You are an outstanding writer.
Go for the sequel! Just try not to make it too similar to this, otherwise it might be kind of dull and boring. It's kind of hard to believe that any of the soldiers died, seeing as how they are half-saiyans, but you could adjust the sequel around it. I guess you didn't go into full depth with the explosion and the Saiya-Jins turning Oozaru, but you could easily write the next story to adjust to the settings of this one and pick up where you left off last. You have enough talent and skills to definately make the sequel work out in your favor!!!
Please write A.S.A.P.!!!! I can't wait to read more!!!
~*Rizu-chan*~ |
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