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| "A Tale of Two Wallets" Reviews/Comments [ 44 ] | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 ] | Reviewed By: Shiva-kun [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2003 19:42 EST
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YES!!! *cough* I've made it to the first page! Let me explain; one of my goals when I posted this story, was to get to the first page of the Ranma 1/2 fanfictions, when sorting by visits. Well, I finally made it. This story is ranked 21 out of 501, (almost) putting me in the top 4% of Ranma fanfictions here. Now if I could only do the same for the other fanfiction posted, Nabiki 1/2... | Reviewed By: Shiva-kun [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2002 15:08 EST
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Well, if you tell me which chapters have that error (and pointing me to the area in that chapter would be helpful as well), then I'll correct it. You can understand if I don't feel like re-reading all the chapters I've edited to correct this one error, albeit it occurs on multiple occasions. | Reviewed By: papillon On: December 30, 2002 15:01 EST
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While you're editing this thing, can you please fix the "bosoms" error? I keep seeing it in several chapters, including this one....
I have TWO breasts, ONE bosom. :) | Reviewed By: Kuno-baby On: December 24, 2002 14:23 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Huge fan of Nabiki and Ranma pairings. Though, it's a struggle, reading this is worth the time and effort! | Reviewed By: Shiva-kun [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2002 19:07 EST
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*Sigh* Having a feminine sounding name sucks sometimes. Shiva is the god (MALE!) of destruction and reproduction in Hindu mythology. He's also the lord of the dance, and part of the Triad. He's the second most worshipped god in Hinduism.
There, now that I have that out of my system, I DO put extra spaces between POV changes, but it's just an extra line. Perhaps I should save the files as HTML and then repost it; that makes it much bigger. | Reviewed By: Toma On: December 11, 2002 15:21 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just finished reading the first 31 chapters of this fanfic. I am thoughrally enjoying the plot as it develops as well as most of your writing techniques. The only constructive criticism I can offer is to perhaps plave a bit more space between POV changes as far as who is narrating or changes in time or area. I found myself occasionally wondering the current setting. Other then that this has been an amazing fic and you have my complements. | Reviewed By: Toolman19 On: December 11, 2002 05:23 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I've got to say, I've read through Mr. Bader's Nabiki 1/2 (or at least all that is posted here) along with all the side stories. So that is why the Ranma-Nabiki-Shampoo get together and hints at Dr. Frank are not the whole 10 points on originality. The spelling and grammer are mostly towards the delightful Lady Shiva-kun, who has taken it upon herself to work hard and diligently on proof-reading all of these works. Most of this is mostly nit-picking, things that can be overlooked, someone being refered to by the wrong name, or a few minor spelling errors, nothing major. Though I do wonder though, exspecialy with as many different perspectives that Mr. Bader tends to jump too, if it might be too much to ask for a seperation each time the sceen changes. Just my two bits. Personaly though, I'm a huge fan of Nabiki, and I really do enjoy these stories, smut and all. They really help to flesh out the rest of the cast. That's all I've got to say, peace out and happy holidays. | Reviewed By: Saki On: December 10, 2002 20:37 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
*Sigh* It's good now to read but it gets worse here on out! And smutty as hell. I've read this story at the first web site and have read more than that's been posted here. I really liked this story in the begining and still kinda do, but it got extremely smutty in later chapters and that soon took over almost the complete storyline. Hentai is fine but it got insane. Just wondering how far this will go or if it'll ever get back to its plot instead of a series long sex scene?! | Reviewed By: Miika On: December 07, 2002 08:15 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Personally I found this story to be so-so!
Starts out rather interesting but then begins a downward curve that just seem to continue indefinetly (or at least as far as I have read)
Itīs main attraction is really itīs massive size not itīs quality. | Reviewed By: Shiva-kun [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2002 00:35 EST
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*Sigh* Unfortunately, I have to say this. I say this in every fanfic, despite the fact that I have it in my profile, which I suppose no one reads. Anyway, back to my point, which is that I did NOT write this story. If you look at the credits each and every chapter it says "Written by Jim Robert Bader; Proofread by Shiva Barnwell". I'm Jim's beta-reader for Nabiki 1/2, and now ATOTW. My goal is to ultimately edit each and all of his fanfics (give me a few years).
Anyway, thank you for reviewing my fanfic, and I thank everyone who has read it thus far. | Reviewed By: Akuma-sama On: December 05, 2002 19:17 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nearly perfect there, only few mistakes i found (No fic has ever scored 10 on grammar with me ^_-). Very fun to read, too! Almost makes me think Nabiki+Ranma are an official Ranma 1/2 couple ^_-.
What's with you and putting Shampoo, Nabiki and Ranma together? lol, not that i mind the mental pictures it gives... *drools and wishes he was Ranma... not all the time, mind you)
Oh, and it's "Trois" ^_- | Reviewed By: Varaya On: December 06, 2002 15:39 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
A really neat story with some interesting ideas (e.g. Nabiki receiving "training", or the Ranma-Nabiki-Shampoo pairing). It's generally a good idea to start out with an "adapted" version of the original storyline, but don't stick too close to it later on, since I think most readers of Ranma fanfics ARE aware of what happened there and don't look too much forward to the n-th varied-due-to-new-pairings variant of the ice-skating match or the chestnuts training. You have an altaverse, so change the story! You don't have to introduce a truckload of new characters to do that, the existing ones are enough, just don't stick like a slave to what happened in which order in the original story. Also, I would not mind having Nabiki's relationship with Ranma advance at a slightly faster pace. I mean - come on, you wrote several times that Nabiki would not mind, and if Nabiki wants something, she usually takes it :) Nevertheless, I am looking forward to the next chapters! | Reviewed By: Saberwulfe [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2003 15:38 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW! I absolutely LOVE this fic! While Nabiki is easily my favorite Ranma 1/2 character (Ranma a close second) You have worked the two togethor in a way I've never seen before. Keep it up! | Reviewed By: Tacobowl On: March 27, 2003 18:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey Shiva-kun, keep up the great work. I'd like to know where the original version of this fanfic is you are editing, thanks. | | Pages (3): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 ] |
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