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| "FORBIDDEN PASSIONS" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] | Reviewed By: lioness45 On: June 19, 2003 17:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
the fic has a very good style of writing and sp. & grammar, along with the originality/creativity, but it's very boring and shouldn't it show how the main couple in the story got together? | Reviewed By: SSJ Cyber Alyson On: January 30, 2003 20:53 CST
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the girl that stole your fanfics well she not on fanfiction.net or mediaminer.org any more but she is still out there at this website and has your fanfic
http://marinelifemag.com/author/723
I tracked her down to see if she was still plaglarising and thought you should know | Reviewed By: anon On: January 02, 2003 00:02 CST
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A little piece of advice: typing in all caps is annoying. If you wish to have a warning label attached to your story, it is perfectly all right to have it in normal type. Those who visit Mediaminer can read. Also, just saying that there is hentai or whatever within the story is sufficient. Babbling on about corruption and puffing up with the big, bad adjectives is unnecessary. Making sense is a plus. | Reviewed By: Daisy On: January 08, 2003 18:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
HUH??????????????????
I read it 3 times,
REALLY HUH???????????????
So this starts at the Trunks Saga, with a few minor changes right?
Trunks and company is from a different time line then the original.
So is he gonna show up to?
I see that Vegeta was training her, so he let her come along,
So why did she bring Baby Trunks.
To the battle ground, What is she gonna do if she is called to fight,
put him down, and ask him to sit still. HUH?
That whole breastfeeding part is well...stupid,
there is nothing erotic about breastfeeding.
Moving along, The 5 arrive,
reiza's there, prepared to fight, and they all show up,
and introduce themselves, while Freiza' what sits,
and has a drink or something. HUH?????
Bra's special power, Ok that one needs no explaining,
It's just the biggest HUH??????? Yet!!!
While Bra is busy, the other are just standing by watching,
Then watch a screen of some sort.
What the hell is the purpose there???
My guess it's more trivial crap. Cause it made no sense.
Then Pan arrives, and just walks up, ignoring the
fact that, her father is even there.
Just standing by while her "friend" insult her grandfather and doesn't say a thing. HUH?
Ok now I am not saying your story ideas were stupid or dumb,
not at all, it's just the flow of the story was far too rushed As I see it,
You are spending too much time
describing, or explaining things to death, and
not allowing the story to follow threw, Too much detail on certain parts,
and not enough on others.
all the “normal talk” :Bond: `thinking' are confusing.
I would clarify that.
Please just slow down, not everything needs to be so rushed.
Anyway, I hope you , can see that I am not trying to flame you,
I just wanted to give an honest review.
It’s a good story, I will be book marking it. | Reviewed By: silverwings [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 2002 10:22 CST
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Hey there Dawn here I have a new website its called DBZ Moonlight Romance In case you hadnt noticed its a fanfic site based on DBZ Love Fanfics please visit it anf if you Have any DBZ Romance Fanfics email me from the Submit Fanfics Page here the URL of my new site.
http://mysite.freeserve.com/DBZMoonlight/
C'ya
Dawn | Reviewed By: VampireGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2002 12:08 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
3rd review...*x files music plays in the background*
searching...for the lost chapter....can't find it....I'm hungry...where's my donut.....where's the next chapter....no one knows...
*creepy music keeps playing as i step backwards into the fog looking like I'm vanishing..then I trip on a rock and fall on my ass* oww...butt hurts.. | Reviewed By: VampireGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2002 12:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Me again. This is my second review. I see that I need 3 reviews to get another chapter. so this is my second review. And....*drums roll*....
I iked it very very very very much! | Reviewed By: VampireGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2002 12:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think your story is going wonderfully. I hope that in the future you will make more chapters.
Because you write really great and your story is coming along just wonderfully. I read your little review type messege you put up and I can not believe some little bitch stole your story and put it up as her own! That just pisses me off to no end. But I think its funny that the same story is on FF.net up as yours. Thats funny, and it serves her right,lil skank. LOL. Continue a.s.a.p I want to know what happens next! I NEED to know. I have no life (duh' i'm a vampire lol) I'm here for you. make a new chapter and I'll review it. I am polite(yah right) enough to review every story I read( I do review EVERY story I read)(sick habit). I hope you do the same. Anywayz I want to see a new chapter up as soon as you have time. | Reviewed By: silverwings [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2002 11:23 CST
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I'll need at least 3 more reveiws for another chapter if not I wont Update
DAWN | Reviewed By: silverwings [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2002 06:23 CST
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My (ex) freind copied my story and put it under her name on fanfiction.net kaylee12 but what she doesnt know is the smae storys already ther my id on FF.net is silverstar |
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