| "Depression" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Title: soz a bit late
Reviewed By: pure black hope On: March 07, 2005 16:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
soz im writin this reviwe way late but i only just read your story it was great and i really want to no what happens to usagi and i hope her step farther gets whats comin to him sooooo plllleeeaaaasssseeee uuuuppppddddaaaatttteee #puppy dog eyes# pretty please
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Reviewed By: Kagero On: August 25, 2004 09:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story so far, very diferent for your standard "senshi kick out Usagi". My only complaint is about the grammar and some confusion about names (in some chapters you call Motoki Matoki or Mitoki, I think you should correct that, if you don´t have time, find a beta reader to correct your stories) Aside that, the story is very good, and with some few original ideais that I haven´t see before (As crazy as it sounds, I liked the idea of Setsuna having Usagi´s guardianship...)
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Title: Eh.
Reviewed By: (This is Yoshimi. I'm too lazy to log in.) On: August 22, 2004 03:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Although this is a well written and well thought-out fanfiction, let's face it. You need to to work on your spelling and grammar. In school you probably were/are the kid who wrote/writes great stories that nobody could/can read. I've been there. I've just started an editing company, though, so if you are interested email me at q@dot-to-dot.com and I will send you the edited, re-organized copy of your story for the low price of nothing! Other than the spelling and crude-ness of parts, it's a good story, just needs a few presentation fix-ups. Maybe you should read 'Contagious' by Graphite, a very, VERY dark story but a definite model of what you are trying to accomplish here. ^^; anyway, arigato for a good read, and email me. Ja ne!
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Reviewed By: (fireash) On: November 20, 2003 16:44 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow...very depressing. too bad i won't know the end. i understand your frustration. it sucks when people don't review. like the story even though i am not really into the gay thing though. but still a good story. i am a pretty open minded person.
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Reviewed By: fariegirl On: July 18, 2003 17:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOU followed a path of writing that i always thouht was intresting but you need to finish it and not leave us hanging |
Reviewed By: Pat On: December 21, 2002 18:10 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I'm depressed just from reading this. Not that's a bad thing. Very sad chapters. It always makes me sad when people are mean to Usagi! |
Reviewed By: Terry On: December 19, 2002 11:26 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very graphic and not for the weak. But good chapter. I'd be ready to commit murder if I was Usagi. |
Reviewed By: jvic119 On: December 18, 2002 20:57 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
getting off to a nice start. hope to see more soon. |
Reviewed By: Ranma 1/2 On: December 16, 2002 15:13 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't be mean to my Usagi! Good chapter. |
Reviewed By: jvic119 On: December 16, 2002 00:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
you can't just leave us hanging like this? more please! |
Reviewed By: ebcar On: December 15, 2002 19:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is very well written. Love the writing style. Story is moving good. Keep up the great job! |
