| "Fumei no Musubi" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Aura890 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2007 15:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I finally realized that if I wished to review this amazing story I would have to join so here I am! lol and this is amazing I found you here after you left FF.net and will review all the fics that I have loved one by one but I had to review this one first as this had me cry you can write so so well and I loved the end I was so excited when I saw that you had finished this :) I would be interested in seeing what happens tho in this world how Yukino (with her way with words lol) and Katsuya go on through life and how Akito finally begins to live how the others go on if there is any more babies on there way and so forth the Rin and Haru's disapearence really made me laugh because I can imagine it happening! :) I'll stop rambling now but this really was amazing :)
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Title: Hallo Ina-chan!
Reviewed By: Tohru819 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2006 22:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey! I'm Hiroko Yamashita from FFNET, that's where I started to read this fic. You havn't updated for more then a year! Are you still doing this fic? Who knows, maybe you've got writers block. Your always talking about how you need inspiration to write a story, so I understand. Pleeeeease do NOT abandon this fic! I love it so, so much! Bai Bai!
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Reviewed By: macbaby On: January 20, 2004 18:10 CST
Comment/Review:
Very well written. I have really enjoyed this fic and can't wait for the next chapter. Ina-chan, great story!
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Reviewed By: Jo-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2003 06:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, first I like the way you write(clearly shown in the rating I gave) and the grammar is fine. Though I think you need to change your format, in the sense that...you have too many spaces in between paragraphs
Nice twists and stuff and the info about the trachs...(I agree, it's not a way to start the morning)
My comments?
Well...I don't know what the time of day it is but I get the feeling it's mostly at night. Sometimes you do say it's done during the night but that's not always so...Maybe you should work on that.
Also...it's too short:) lengthen it for me will ya?
I'd want to tell you to change how you wrote the umm...conversations where in you had to emphasize the words to tell as they're screaming at the top of their lungs but then again if you did we wouldn't know they were doing that but it was painful to read.
There, love your fic. :) |
