Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2003 23:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Pale Green Stars? I like that title!! Hell, I have some on my ceiling. (so does my boyfriend:)
That's an Everclear song?? From what album?? I only have their "So Much For the Afterglow," but then, I don't buy that many CDs. I may have to go hunt out that song on KaZaA or BearShare...
*phew!* I'm glad you are getting reviews somewhere. Fanfiction.net? If so, that makes sense. There is a lot more traffic there and more people review, sometimes. (although, I prefer MediaMiner because it's easier for me to use)
So what do I like about this story? Well, I'm liking the underlying "sheets" mystery. (When I started reading, I was like, "What the heck ARE those things? Those Listerine things to freshen your breath? Vegeta sure likes his breath fresh." *lol* Plus, I just like the story idea; it took a couple chaps to hook me, but then it was gold! OH, I like the idea that the lack of emotions could effect the Saiyans in a NEGative way. And, it just backs up my belief that strong/overwhelming emotions are needed to become a Super Saiyan.
The lemon was nice too. Although, at first it kind of seemed weird to me that Bulma was being so aggressive. (not skanky, just blunt) But then... it's an AU. And I think that it fits well into this story. I mean, Vegeta needs SOMEone to help him learn emotions and uh.... the greater "pleasure" in life. *snickers*
Overall, I like this very much. Uh ... except for the part about her dad bursting in. *shudders* That's just SCAREy. *heh*
Um ... if it wouldn't be a problem could you send me an email (to duonotsuin@yahoo.com) when you update this story?? Thanks so much! ^_^ |
