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| "Marron Sandwich 3: Different Definitions of Forever" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] | Title: Nooo!
Reviewed By: Caprice [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2008 00:15 CDT
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Kinomi, the revered. I absolutely agree with anyone that says they love your fics. Your style is superb, you have mastery over narration and I can definitely see why this story has developed into a classic. That said, and eventhough this third installment is absolutely great written, I just hated the fact that Goten didn't pick Trunks. I am probably alone in this, but I was sorry for the way you took Trunks and made him into little more than a jerk with this third part. You ealted his relationship with Goten to such a heartwarming point that I felt a little cheated to see how they lost that amazing dynamic, that bond that was so unique to Goten and him. It wasn't until this very last episode that I realized this story isn't about Goten and Trunks, it really is about Marron.
| Reviewed By: Kricket [MediaMiner Member] On: March 05, 2008 10:09 CST
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You know, it's not just the steamy love scenes that draw me to your writing...it's also the intense emotions you incorporate into them. So beautiful, really...*sighs* Just too good.
| Reviewed By: Jeez On: June 17, 2003 09:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely loved this fic. The style of writing was very descriptive, maybe a bit much, but it was wonderful. Spelling and grammar was perfect. The creativity was excellent; I haven't read any other fic like this, much less a trilogy. And the enjoyment factor was SUPERB! I loved it, I loved it, I loved it!! Great work!!! | Reviewed By: Jeez On: June 17, 2003 08:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely loved this fic. The style of writing was very descriptive, maybe a bit much, but it was wonderful. Spelling and grammar was perfect. And the enjoyment factor was great! I loved it, I loved it, I loved it!! Great work!!!Font Color | Reviewed By: manda On: May 02, 2003 08:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
..trailed over here from ffnet to access ur fics -which are so DAMN good that ffnet is prob too scared to host em =P
this was such a beautiful story, the first fic ever to make me seriously feel like crying!
an excellent sequel to the Marron sandwich. | Reviewed By: Naturi [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2003 10:15 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That, without a doubt, was the BEST DBZ story I have read in a long time. I loved the angst, the doubt, the anger, and the eternal love shown in this story. It made it that much more real. Trunks acted like an overconfident dick, just like his damn daddy, and he got shafted because of it. He fully expected Goten to fall back into him like always, but Go-chan shocked the hell outta him!!! Plus the lemons were so hot and sensual...sex in front of the mirror is incredible... *ahem* well hurry and write the second installment to this...i'll be waiting!!! | Reviewed By: Faye Valentine [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2003 22:12 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THAT, my friend, was WONDERFUL!!!!!!!
I'm dead serious. That was the best sequel to a purely PWP fic ever! You're so good at this stuff. ^_^ Great, wonderful, awesome job!!
Luv,
Niblet! | Reviewed By: xshiny [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2003 16:16 CST
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OI! lol i remember the first one! and what a great sequel kinomi! lol gj keep it up ^.^ | Reviewed By: Faye Valentine [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2003 19:02 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. (*.*) *jaw drops* KAWAIIII! | Reviewed By: chocolateblood On: January 10, 2003 12:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I always judge a story by the way it gets a reaction out of me. I can't believe that you've made me hate Trunks! No one has ever done that before and I'm told that I'm completely obssessed about him. If I wasn't the type of person that would take a miracle to make her cry, I'm positive that I'd be bawling my eyes out.
I think my heart broke a couple of times while I was reading your fic. I swear, your style of writing and the way your stories develop are amazing. Although I have to admit that Goten's proposal at the end was expected. I'm not saying that I didn't like it. (Please don't hate me.) But who doesn't like happy endings. If you would've put a sad ending you would have most definitely killed me.
Keep on writing more works of art! | Reviewed By: hippiechick83 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2003 23:14 CST
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AHH!!! I can review!!! I read all this last night and tried to review and the stupid site wouldn't let me!!! I was soooo mad!!! This was total awesomeness!!!! I thought this was the most amazing ending to the story. The first story was really great and I loved reading it, but this was so deep and intimate. I couldn't help feel everything Marron felt and hope and pray that Goten not be a fool. Ever since you told me you were considering a sequel, I have been very exicted, but I had no idea it would be this amazing. I don't know what other word to use to describe it except amazing. When Marron left the house in total dispair believing what she was doing was in Goten's best intersts, I felt my heart break for her and even though I knew he had to choose her and come after her, I just couldn't stop. I had to make sure. There are so many things I'd like to say about this. The problem is I don't think words can really cover my thoughts and feelings on this story. I seriously can not wait until you write something new. Until that avidly awaited posting, Peace and Out. | Reviewed By: Viper2999 On: January 09, 2003 16:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! This has to be one of the better romance genre stories I've read in quite some time.
Nice work, I liked it even more than the original.
The pairing came as a surprise. Everyone was in charactor (For the most part. I thought the way Trunks was acting was a bit extreme, but the story wouldn't have made a whole lot of sense if he was a perfect gentleman ^_^), something I don't see to often (and something for which I'm eternaly greatful when I see it).
You did an excellent job of writing everyone's emotions. I can't really say anything about the Lemmon scenes (Skim em' I do, nothing personal, I just don't think I'm old enough to be reading them ).
All in all, an excelent story and a nice start for 2003. | Reviewed By: Ashley [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2003 15:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i seriously loved the sequal... it gave this incredible awww factor that only you can do to me *sigh*... It's so good, you ended it just right, keep up the good work!! | Reviewed By: Mirai Marron [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2003 23:02 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was really great! I laughed, I cried, I said "Awwww" 57 times. I'm glad you finally finished the sequel.
Now, you have to work on that middle story where the three of them are on vacation. :B Write! Write! ::cracks whip, then notices she's being given the Kinomi Glare Of Death(tm):: --er.. write? ::runs away:: | Reviewed By: fusionHA [MediaMiner Member] On: January 06, 2003 21:15 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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OOOOOOOOO! YOU KNOW I LOVE THIS! Hell, I've been begging for it for months, even before we became friends, so you know I'd be the first one here! ^_^ I asked for a crazy, wild lemon and you certainly delivered! *phew!* And damnit! You made me hate Trunks again! The only one I consistantly root for in your fics is Marron... but that's assumed, isn't it ^_~
Okay, now to start the begging for part 2... |
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