| "Brother for lover" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Kalill On: January 07, 2004 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey,you've got a good idea about the story, but your rushing it. I couldn't understand what was going on and why. Explain a few things please. Your on the right track, just keep trying. If you'd like some pointers in writing, just look up my nahaujaret on the authors and read my fanfic.
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Reviewed By: Inuma Sancton On: July 06, 2003 01:36 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
2 problems u 4get 2 put quotation marks and some words are run together but i can figure everything out in 1 second it's ok did u intentionaly change rins' past i think so anyways great story please finish
you know when i read the title i thought that this was going to be one of those gay stories about inu and ses together those stories really creep me out. |
Reviewed By: Rinchan's flower [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2003 19:17 CST
Comment/Review:
Wai! I live! Yay a fic with Rin, and she can do stuff! ^^ very cool. Do write more, love to see it ^.~ |
