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| "At Yugi's Place ep 5" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Melvin On: July 25, 2003 23:19 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
poor yugi. maya slipped yugi a mickey and had her way with him!
will justice be served and will maya be punished for her crime?
would a jury believe yugi's tale that maya forced it on him, and more importantly will mai?
some of the spelling and gramar was a bit off and the name maya sounds too much like mai.
you do have courage though for straying from the usual yugi/tea or mai/joey pairings. | Reviewed By: zero On: April 17, 2003 20:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice fic. can u continue with ur story? | Reviewed By: DJ On: January 13, 2003 06:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is getting interesting. I have a few suggestions here for the next one. I hope you approve. Here it is!
Mai is stil broken on how she saw Yugi and Maya together. However, she soon finds the empty love potion bottle and realizes that Yugi was telling the truth. She then remembers on how she said that she would love Yugi until the end. She is really heartbroken, because she jumped to conclusions twice already and had reopened Yugi's wounds, both physically and emotionally. She runs out to the city, frantic to find him. She does, but Yugi is not glad to see her. Even after all he had said and done to be loyal to her, she still does not trust him. Mai pleads for Yugi to forgive her and to come back, but he is a little reluctant. He tells Mai that she needs to trust him more if their relationship is going to better. He tells her that he trusts her, and will never abandoned her. Never has, never will. Mai is moved to tears, and now begs for Yugi to forgive her. She tells him that she is willing to do anything to make it up to him. Anything! Yugi has one thing in mind. He tells her that he will forgive her, but on one condition. And that is to confront Maya and both of them settle this! That's right, an all-out catfight! Mai is more then happy to agree to that. She wants to send Maya to the hospital!
Well, that's it. I hope you approve. Keep it up! |
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