| "Athena" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Title: Athena
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2005 19:24 CST
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: ehhhh
Reviewed By: kitty_5354356 On: November 15, 2003 21:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
i didn't really like it sorry couldnt finish it...
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Reviewed By: Asher Arricks On: July 17, 2003 09:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know the begining of the story I thought, wow maybe I'll read this through, but as I read more, the more I wanted to gag, and it was torture to finish this chapter. The grammer was horrible Sentences like "Polls (pools maybe) of water she had for eyes." I also noticed there were no plural's in this entire chaper, which I believe is damn annoying. Like "Their thought(s) were a blur." and sentences like "Dig up some anymore Information" I know your not in the third grade, so don't write like it! If you really want people to go past the first chapter get an editor, or go through the chapter with a fine tooth comb yourself, by reading it aloud! Email me when you get this edited, then I'll read your Hentai, and if you can't find an editor I'll edit it for you, just ask!
Asherarricks@yahoo.com |
Reviewed By: Jen On: April 16, 2003 11:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I only got through the first chapter, but if this was any indication of your writing and the overall theme of this fic, I have no regrets about stopping there. Stylistically your writing needs work: transitions are virtually nonexistant, and the numerous spelling and grammer errors tend to distract the readers. A beta reader is highly recommended. That being said, I believe your writing has potential to improve. |
Reviewed By: Snowpuff On: April 06, 2003 19:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very Nice, keep writing. ^.^ |
Reviewed By: cuttie_blossom [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2003 15:56 CST
Comment/Review:
please update i love it!! :} |
Reviewed By: PrincessTrista On: January 28, 2003 12:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I love reading this kind of story |
Reviewed By: Eric On: January 28, 2003 04:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please keep it up, continue until you finish it |
Reviewed By: Scout1 On: January 19, 2003 01:42 CST
Comment/Review:
I think the word you were looking for was "orgasm", not "organism"... |
Reviewed By: Leslie On: January 16, 2003 22:08 CST
Comment/Review:
Hate it. That was way to slutty... |
