| "Forever Lonely" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Jean De Metz On: February 08, 2003 09:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have an excellent beginning for a story here and what looks to be a very intricate character, but your writing style is a little less than what it has the potential to be. Try not to make your sentences so choppy, and of course write more because you now have a lot of people wondering what is going to happen next. |
Reviewed By: Lone Vixen On: February 01, 2003 20:19 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm glad the title sparked my interest when i was passing by it. This is a very interesting story you have going here...i hope to see your new chapters posted soon. It reminds me of some ancient mythology stories i read. I can relate to this story in several ways so it somewhat touched me. as lame as it sounds...
but hey, at least i gave a nice review! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Duo no Tsuin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 28, 2003 23:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ummmm.... I know this is labeled a DBZ AU(alternate universe).... but will the story have more to do with the DBZ timeline or characters? Will there be unusual pairings in this fic? I'm just wondering.
Suggestion ... I think you should add something to your summary about how this story contains an OC(original character) *shrugs* Just to prevent any flames in the future.
It was a little awkward when the story shifted from Mirla's point of view to a regular narration later. (But then, I guess it makes sense since she was rightly out of it)
Mirla sounds like a really intricate character and I'd like to see where her immortality leads her. ^_^
(her own MOTHER!?!? *shakes head* what a shame...) |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2003 16:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow that was a great start for this fic I want to know more keep up the good work |
