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Title: Review from me to me!
Reviewed By: Mukuro May On: August 06, 2005 13:30 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's been 2 years since I wrote this 3-chapter fic, and I decided to read it again... for no special reason. I guess I'm going to write a review now, to myself, as a reader. Well, the 3x4 fic is soooo freaking romantic, it's kind of annoying. But for a romantic story, it's good. There are still english mistakes and I notice two or three sentences that are very... disturbing, gramatically speaking! LOL The 1x2 fic is much, much better! I think I like it now more than I did before when I wrote it. The begining is perfect, the dialogues between the characters are very funny and the sex was very hot. I think maybe Heero was a little too brutal, but it's okay! Yey for me! The 5x13 fic is... ok. Actually I think the relationship is so complex that maybe it would have been better to have extended some moments and reflections, making the fic much more angsty. The sex was awfull. Too short, I sould have really changed it. And what the heck is wrong with the format?? Heck!!
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Reviewed By: R_Winner [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2004 01:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok I have to admit, on your first chapter... I didn't think I'd like it too much. The begining was a little odd for me. HOWEVER! You gave me quite the surprise... You made everything flow in beautifuly. You made the akwardness of the situation very real and natural for Quatre and Trowa. If this were to occur in the show, i could see it turning out like that. I must say, I was over all, very impressed!
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Reviewed By: R_Winner [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2003 00:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
You're 3x4 was sooo cute.. I could see them fumbling like that it was wonderfull keep it up!
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Reviewed By: Sejou On: June 20, 2003 22:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
That was wonderful... more, please? I wanna see Wufei and Treize together... |
Reviewed By: Channah On: June 20, 2003 09:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like the first one, "tell me what you want" It's different from all the other fics I know, but it's exactly how a first time ought to be. Keep up the good work! I'm hoping to see more of you. |
Reviewed By: Jessica On: March 31, 2003 22:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOAH! You are an EXCELLENT writer. You caught the characters perfectly... love it... HEY! Are you gonna do a Trieze X Wufei soon? |
Reviewed By: angel wings kit On: March 04, 2003 14:57 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love it i love it i love it i love it |
Reviewed By: Gem On: February 25, 2003 15:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've never read a fic like this, but I loved it |
Reviewed By: Koneko On: February 12, 2003 13:18 CST
Comment/Review:
Hei, congratulations M-chan. I loved your fic... again. I fell in love with the way you write your stories... I have to say that I liked your 3x4 most. It's longer and more romantic, it's more like me... Although the 1x2 is excellent, I believe it's perfect, Duo and Heero together are the best, and you did it even better... Nice work. |
Reviewed By: Angela =^_^= On: February 14, 2003 14:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there,May-san!
Great 1x2,I loved it!You caught Duo and Heero perfectly,in my opinion and it was just as good,if not better,than your 3x4 fic.(Which I also thought was *so* cool,as you know from my letters. ^^ Great job,I look forward to reading your 5x13,when you get it posted.I loved Duo and Heero's little rough shower sceen,as well.*blushing now* Whew,perfect mental image of that...I just love it when those two play together.(It gets even better when they invite Wufei along ^^)As always,keep up the good work!
See you,
Angela =^_^= |
Reviewed By: Angel of innocence On: February 15, 2003 13:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i really liked the stories you have a talent u should keep writing more and u wrote my favourite pairs too u really should continue to write more |
Reviewed By: Koneko On: February 05, 2003 16:22 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey M-chan,
I've already read your fic before, but I tought it would be a good idea to pass by and leave you a review. You know what I think of this fic... it's great, really. I think you did a very good job on this one. Congratulations, I hope the next lemons are as good as this one. I can't wait to see your 1x2. |
Reviewed By: Sky High Tempest On: February 05, 2003 01:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Happy First Lemon!
Very original and realistic. Most people just focus on the act of making love, but you managed to capture the truer aspects of it.
Hooray for you! |
Reviewed By: Zarra Rous On: February 04, 2003 00:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was beautiful and I feel it described their relationship perfectly. |
Reviewed By: Spike Spiegal On: February 03, 2003 08:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
I loved this lemmon....It`s a wonderfull story...Congratulations Mukuro, Keep the good work. |
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