| "“Brothers and Other Members of the Family”" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: m On: September 17, 2005 13:36 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm not sure if you intended it to, but the whole story got put together in one big paragraph. If that is not how you wanted it to be, I would suggest that you find a way to get it to look the way you want it to be. (Sorry, can't help you out with that one, I don't know how myself.) If that IS how you wanted it to look, my suggestion would be to make smaller paragraphs, it makes it a lot easier for the reader and much more likely for it to be read. Sorry if I'm sounding picky, but I hope that helped at least a little.
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Reviewed By: it thing On: November 10, 2003 22:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved the story, very nice ending. hope you continue
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Reviewed By: Senaca On: February 06, 2003 16:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
As a first fic, i totally love the idea that Inu-yasha thought of Shipou as a brother. As i was reading this fic, i was reminded of some pictures/epsiodes i seen where Inu-yasha would play around w/ Shippou. After reading this fic, i think of those 2 as brothers now. Thanks for writing the fic, please continue writing good fics. |
Reviewed By: sesshoumaru lover On: February 04, 2003 21:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cute story!
please continue! |
Reviewed By: Eastsidegeorgiaboy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2003 14:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was new, and i liked it. keep it up. |
