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Reviewed By: Viewtiful Joe On: January 14, 2004 18:14 CST
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Title: A little advise
Reviewed By: Chirs Redfield On: December 08, 2003 20:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I got another one for you. If the Darkness trys to take the tamer's home town. See if the darkness brings back Leomon and takes control of his mind and Jeri comes and try to remind him what he said to her at the day of his death. She has a lion's heart and when he's free of the dark control, Jeri's partnership with Leomon summens a power that they can give to Alan. Which is the Final Fantasy 8 limit break Lion's Heart. Not bad if I do say so my self. Oh by the way, how about you at least try to get 3 or 4 chapters updated by the 25th of this month. As Ace Ventora pet detective alway said "Take care now. Bye bye then."
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Title: Crazy Tips
Reviewed By: Chris Redfield On: November 22, 2003 22:16 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now before I give you more tips I want to clear one thing up. Chirs as in Chirs Redfield is my future athur, my real name is Jonathan Smith. If you want to know where I got Chirs Redfield from it from a Charicter from Resident Evil on the Gamecube. NOW for the tips. You can give Alan the power to run as fast as Sonic and turn in to a super form with all 7 chaos emeralds. Give Alan a Dules Monster card all the Gardian Angle. I made this card up my self. His attack is Heaven' s wrath attack, you make up the rest. And a trap card called Heaven's Jugdment. This card can only work with the Gardian Angle. with this combo the Gardian Angle can kill one monster instantly (even if its more powerful) and attack Alan's opoinet's life points directly. And a magic card called Holy light of Heaven. This card can turn your opoinets Dark type monsters in to light type monsters and join your side. Well that it for right now by the way lets see if you can update 3 to 4 more chapter before Cristmas Day. And again I'm sorry mistake in my name.
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Title: Speed it up
Reviewed By: Chirs Redfield On: November 10, 2003 18:23 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I realy like what you got here, but you got to speed the updating more. If your stuck or something I got one good tip. Let Alan have a blue card and make hime digivole into a Ultimate digimon. The name and looks of his ultimate form is left up to you. I just want to be surpirsed. Now update before December comes.
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Reviewed By: Sakuracheary On: October 27, 2003 13:54 CST
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This is a really cool fanfic so far!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:) ;)
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Title: Finally
Reviewed By: FireEyes Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2003 09:44 CDT
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About time. I can't wait for the next chapter, but just don't take a month to post it, alright? Later
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Title: Taking too long
Reviewed By: Chris Redfield On: October 14, 2003 16:34 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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First of all I'm waiting for the next chapter second of all you're taking too long btween you chapters. When you first started on this thing 3 days between chapters, now it like once a month ot so. It's time to stop slaking and get cracking.One more thing give Alan a limit break, if you can think of one that is.
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Title: CONTINUE!
Reviewed By: FireEyes Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2003 18:07 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Come on, dude! Continue this story! It's really good and I want to read more! And when is the Yu-Gi-Oh! cast going to appear? Please continue! |
Reviewed By: Chris On: July 07, 2003 01:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's been a while sence you updated. Now before I go on let just just say that I`m not fanfic writer yet, and their's one more thing I want to say. If their's any thing that I hate about this fanfic it is a cliffhanger. You shoud go on if you don't have any ideas then here are some hints from me. You know on the Final Fantasy game when the people you're playing as takes a few hits, it triggers the "limmet breaks" (whick I like to call them) which alows them to us very special attacks rether than the regular special attacks.You really should give Alan a limit break like when Alan is realy hurt bad then he fills a blast of energy in him which makes him feel like fighing more than ever unleashes a shavge attack. Another tip from me is give Alan a summoning like Sheava the ice summoning or maybe Doomtrain form Final Fantasy 8. Another tip you don't have to take this one if you don't want to, but I just want to tell you any way. See if you can have Sephroth bring Leomon back to life to fight Alan. I know I sound crazy, but see if you can fit that in when the darkness tires to take over the Tamers hometown or somthing and while you're at it add some other cast from Digimon, Pokemon, Medabots, Card Captor Sakura, and Dragan Ball Z. And don't forget about Zell's taste for hotdogs. Well thats all the tips I can give you. Oh one more thing, you need to ajust your spelling abit.
Now go on and finish this thing to the end and let me remind you I HATE cliffhagers in such good stories like these. Reminds my of Sonic SatAm. One more thing before I finish up. If any one wants a good dirty NC17 crossover fanfic then I suggest sombody out there comes up with a fanfic that has Sailor Moon, Sonic, Yu-Gi-Oh, Digimon, Pokemon, and many more that come togther with Conker's Bad Fur Day. If any one as played the game on Nintedo 64 you'll know what I'm talking about. |
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