| "When I have lost my temper" Reviews/Comments [ 19 ] |
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Reviewed By: Catalina27 On: June 07, 2005 23:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You didn't post the last chapter:( A pretty good fic but you need to edit more. Your mistakes weren't just grammar. One night it's a new moon and 4 nights later it's full? and I do believe the heart is on the left side, not right. Things like this were distracting but the story itself was creative, went off character a bit but I love the fact that it's Kagome who kicks Naraku's butt in the end. Wonderful romantic scenes as well.
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Reviewed By: Animeluver1368 loged out On: February 22, 2005 18:54 CST
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I love it, it has a lot of potential and a great plot. The only thing wrong is your spelling, it sortta ruins the story when you have to ponder what that unspelles word is. I cannot wait for you to updat even though you have not in a long time. If you update this story than more people will read and review it. Keep up the great work. And I love how your imagination works.
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Title: AAAAWESOMME
Reviewed By: ptbear [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2004 19:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome story. Update soon. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Title: please???
Reviewed By: baka_juju2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 29, 2004 23:32 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Me: Will you please update your story because I'm just impatient dammit! - Sess: Mind your temper... remember what happened last time? - Me: Yes. I don't want that to happen ever again. - Sess: Did you forget that today we're mpfh - Me: (covers his mouth) Shut up! Not everybody needs to know about my.. - Sess: You almost said it. You should go stalk something. A butterfly mabye. - Me: Don't even start! You're the one who nearly jumped out of your skin when one landed on your nose, and then you yelled at when it wasn't scared of you! Ha! - Sess: That was when I was a child.. - Me: Ha! That was just mpfh..! - Sess: (clamps hand over my mouth) That is enough! No more telling the people about my life. Stop squirming koi. It won't do any good, now lets go home. Oh and you author person, update your story quickly. Come koi. - Me: Can we go to that sushi restraunt on our way home? (puppy dog face) Please!? - Sess: If we must... - Me: (glomps him) Thank you Thank you Thank you! YEAH! Later you author person.
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Reviewed By: Relix On: January 28, 2004 17:32 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How long until epilogue?
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Reviewed By: Hellkeeper On: November 15, 2003 17:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG that was the best thing i have every read in my whole life. it was soo so, i can't even find words to describe it omg
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Reviewed By: Little John of Locksland On: November 06, 2003 17:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
You've probably heard it a hundred times but your grammar and spelling skills leave a lot of room for improvement. You also really need to read your own work before posting it since some of the mistakes are not explained away by bad skills in the English language. Use of the word 'of' when 'off' is needed being one such example. You also get into trouble at times regarding tense issues. You used 'loss' instead of the correst 'lose' at one point for instance. The story itself was alright but problems with sentence structure, misused words, and spelling problems caused the enjoyment of it to plummet. If you can fix that one area of your writing which is in dire straits then this story would be practically perfect.
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Reviewed By: moonbay On: July 10, 2003 01:59 CDT
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i hate you, the story was excellent untill sesshy died. I hate you. Sesshy cant die. |
Reviewed By: amanda On: June 10, 2003 13:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
YOU HAVE TO WRITE THE ENDING PLEASE!!!!! it is going to drive me crazy@ if you dont
~~Me~~ |
Reviewed By: Sorrow On: June 07, 2003 01:17 CDT
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Ahh you have to hurry and write more snff poor sess sniff but oh well time to write more eh |
Reviewed By: Kilala36 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2003 09:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was good! Please continue NOW Or FEEL MY WRATH. I give you a 400/400 |
Reviewed By: allitsuchi On: April 03, 2003 18:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hury up and put the next chapter up
or die |
Reviewed By: Kiki On: March 12, 2003 08:47 CST
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I like it. Good story. Please continue. |
Reviewed By: Zerianyu [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2003 20:37 CST
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I like the story but I can't read it all ause it is cut off on the right side of the page could you mabey e-mail the first xhapter to me or fix that or something I want to finish the story my e-mail is zerianyu@yahoo.com |
Reviewed By: nekokami On: February 22, 2003 17:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
MY RATING MY CHANGE IF YA TELL ME SANGO REACTION TO THE 'HAPPY EVENT' I HATE CLIFFHANGERS!!!!!! ...hehe she REALLY is gonna kill him when she learns that Kagome is, well...expecting. ^__^;
CLEAN UP YOUR SPELLING
it would help make the fic more readable(but dont worry your fic IS good, it just could be better,also. |
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