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| "Coming Home" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Paranormal On: April 08, 2003 19:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
personally i say screw the reviewers who said heero was too girly...i think that if anyone found out that their lover had knocked someone else up they would be sad and pissed. i mean really, just because heero is the perfect soldier does not mean he lacks emotion and feelings. and i mean come on...this is after the wars, they've all moved on and obviously become new people, heero has the right to get upset. anyways...i love the story and i think it's extremely well written. i didn't really see any corrections that were needed in it...maybe just to add little more detail to some of the parts, but otherwose it's great!! ^.^ | Reviewed By: Yume Maxwell-Yuy [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2003 07:38 CST
Comment/Review:
awwwwwwwww. Kawaii. I lurved it to bits. that last chapter was just soo cute. With how Duo asked Heero to marry him. I lurve an innocent Hee-chan. Its just soo kawaii. Keep up the good work. ja ne | Reviewed By: Aria On: February 22, 2003 07:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story is good, but you made Heero too wimpy. He wouldn't cry like that, at least not where the other pilots could hear him. I agree with him closing up and not talking to anyone, that is what I think is most characteristic to Heero. The
Duo and Hilde is a good idea because it bot only adds to the plot it brings some sense of reality to this story. The only part I don't like is how Duo seemed so scared of telling his friends what had happened. It ended up making the plotline too rushed and crammed together. I think the ending was a little weird because if Duo had hurt Heero I don't think Heero would have forgiven him that easily. Overall it is a fantasti fic and i hope you write more of stories very soon.
Love ya,
Aria | Reviewed By: Ita-chan On: February 21, 2003 10:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's not good,...but it's not bad either,...just that the plot seems abit too rush and lack in some parts,...and i really hate the way ya make heero seems too much like a girl,...the way he lock himself and cry,...YYYuucckks,...i couldn't imagine heero act like that,...he might clam-up and go cold as ice,...and his perfect-soldier mask falling-into-space,...but running and crying like an-onna,...NNNNuhhh-UUUhhhh,...NNNNooootttt THE heero-yuy we AAllllllll know and love,...it's ok to make heero soft and gentle,...but PPllleaaseeeeee,...don't over-do-it,...herro can be an uke,...but an uke that still a guy,...NOT an uke that is an onna,...with a COCK,...RRRemeemberrrrr that kay,...sorry if i sound abit piss here,...just tryin to make a stand for heero-character,...after all i said here,...that doesn't mean that this fic of yours isn't good,...just that it needs abit more improvements in some parts,...hope yer-gona continue writin 2+1 fics,...and hopefully it will be much more better in the future,....keep-up the good work,...and keep-on improving yer-characterizations-of the characters,...[sorry if my spelling is bad]..
till next time,...JJJJaaaaaaaaaaaa and GGGaaaanbbbbaaaaateeeeeee-Neeeeee!!^.~!! |
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