Reviewed By: wren_legacy [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2003 20:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
Okay, I LIKE YOUR STORY!!!!!!!!!^_^ Sorry you don't have any other reviews. Hope you can deal with constructive criticism, cause thats what your gonna get! The plot was pretty good and I like the pairing, but read it again. Notice how fast it moves? Slow it down abit. The lemon didn't really, oh I don't know, click? But then again I know how hard they can be to write. Pleasse write more? Slow it down and give it more detail and backround and you'll have the perfect story! Sorry that I sound nit picky, I'm nt really like that, I just want to help. If you don't quite understand my thoughts just email me, okay? Write more soon! Pwitty pwease? ^_~ |
