| "Saiyan Men" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] |
Title: Saiyan Men
Reviewed By: DetoxAngel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2007 04:27 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Errr...the incest made me shake until I thought I was having a seizure. Uh...but the Vegeta going crazy and trying to kill Gohan, was way off. I thought it was going to be a fun fic, but this is a prime example of why you don't mix angst with PWP's. It's weird, like in this fic. I liked it up until then, then I stopped reading. Still, the sex scene between Bulma, Goku and Vegeta was either plaigerised or copied from an author with a different penname and the same MO. I've been seeing that a lot lately and I'm a bit worried that this site allows plaigerism or whatever. If this is originally your work, with a twist, then that really wasn't a good idea to combine a previous work with a new one, even though the situation somewhat fit. Because then came that distracting, and uninteresting, wierd, killing thingy you had going on there. Nice try though, the beginning about up to chapter four was good. You should cut this down and just make it a senseless PWP unless you can modify and edit this better.
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Title: This story was the best!
Reviewed By: www.fuck-a-yo-a-pinon.com On: March 29, 2005 08:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LUB HAPPY ENDIN'S Nah im just fuckin wit'cha I thought the story was very emotion and sad really(Execpt for the serial fornication) PS:Who would of thought gohan?!...And he wass always a nice little boy too.
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Title: IM SOOO HORNEY FOR PUSSY
Reviewed By: JACKIN OFF TO U On: February 26, 2004 22:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
OK I UNZIP MY PANTS AND SLIP OUT MY COCK THEN I START GETTING A BONER....THEN I START MOVING MY HAND UP AND DOWN ON MY DICK THE OHHHHH OHHHHH OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH MY CUM SPRAYS ALL OVER MY BED THEN I CALL MY GIRLFRIEND 10 YEARS OLD AND FUCK HER ALL NIGHT LONG AND THEN WE GET CAUGHT BE HER SIS AND I FUCK HER INSTED 18 YEARS OLD FUCKIN HER SO HARD O MY GOD IMA RIDE U SOOOOOO HARD O MY GOD SUCK MY HUGE JUCY COCK OOOOOO OOOOO OOOOOO thump thump thump O I THINK MY BED I BREAKING CUZ IM HUMPIN U SOO HARD UUUUU UUUUU UUUUUU 9 MONTHS LATER OMY GOD U BASTERD I HATE U MY GIRLFRIEND IN LABOR I NEW I SHOUL HAVE FUCKED U WITH PROTECTION OWELL BITCH U GOT A BABY COMING OUT OF U HOT TIGHT PUSSY AND IN A MONTH U GOT A HUGE HARD COCK COMING IN IT AGAIN WITH OUT PROTECTION 1 MONTH LATER O MY GOT ERIC I LOVE SUCKING UR BIG HARD COCK AND U SHOUVING IT IN MY HOT TIGHT PUSSY OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO OO MY CUM OVERFLOWS OUT OF HER PUSSY AND SHE LICKS IT UP THEN SUCK MY DICK DRY THEN I STICK MY WHOLE ARM IN HER PUSSY THEN TAKE IT OUT THEN LICK ALL THE PUSSY JUICE OFF MY ARM THEN I SLEEP WITH MY DICK IN HER PUSST AS HARD AS A ROCK MORNING O MY GOD ERIC UR HUGE COCK IN MY HOT TIGHT PUSSY I THINK U CAN GUESS THE REST
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Title: horny
Reviewed By: bigdick On: February 26, 2004 22:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
well i like to see goku and vageta fuck eachother in the ass and i like hot tight pussys to so i think bulma and goku and vegeta shoul 3 som hell yea i coul amigin it (goku) o bulma ur hot tight pussy fells so good on my big hard cock (bulma)O MY GOD GOKU I THINK YOUR GUNNA RIP ME IN HALF WITH THAT HUGE JUCY COCK!!!!!! (vegeta)cmoer bitch lemme choke u with my huge rock hard cock....YEA BULMA BITCH RIDE MY HUGE HARD COCK OHHH OHHHHHHH OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
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Reviewed By: demetzx On: August 30, 2003 08:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
I was with the story until you got to the incest.
The lead up with Vegeta yelling about nothing and ultimately inarticulately was monotonous and boring. |
Reviewed By: kitkat On: August 10, 2003 14:40 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hi! I just discovered this story and i liked it a lot. Now i think: why don't you do both a pre-quel and a sequel? I'd like to know why Vegeta didn't blasted Goku to hell when he dared kiss him. It's clear Vegeta felt, even if just a little, something for Goku and vice-versa, 'cause no horny state would make Goku jump in Vegeta if he didn't feel something. Well this could be situation in the pre-quel, now about the sequel you could do something regarding how dirty Goku feels now that he is a murderer, and how Gohan feels about his mistakes too, and how Vegeta feels towards Goku now that he (Goku) is a GOD to his standards, i mean now Goku is a true saiyan: cold and bloodlusting after all he killed Vegeta without think twice. I say he would be madly in love with Goku if it was me who was writing this story... but as i don't have any talent to write i can only hope someone will do this for me.^^
Other idea is rewrite this story in Vegeta's POV. I still don't believe he allowed Goku to go on with his onna even if he was there as well. The only conclusion i get is he wanted to have his turn with Kakarott afterwards.
ok, enough of talking here. i hope you will do something soon.
oh, and i must ask you to forgive my mistakes as english is not my native language.
Dewa matta. |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA On: May 26, 2003 18:22 CDT
Comment/Review:
THANK GOD U UPDATED!!!
I LOVE THIS FIC VEGETA HAS ASCENDED AND HE HAS SHOWN GOHAN HIS FUCKING PLACE!!!! YAYYYYY!!
Will he show anyone else!??
UPDATEEEEE! |
Reviewed By: mischief maker [MediaMiner Member] On: March 06, 2003 08:07 CST
Comment/Review:
I think every last one of them has lost their minds! Heh heh. The lemon was good, although it was hard to read about Gohan doing anything like that at his age. What was Veggie doing through all this, watching? Aaah, the insanity! I think they will all need some serious therapy by the time this story is finished! Update soon. |
Reviewed By: utsukushi On: February 23, 2003 13:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is sooo great. I love reading lemons and yours is quite unique. I can't wait to see what will happen. Will Chichi go and visit capsule corp. and catch them? Will she be mad, angry,intrigued, maybe even a little...horny? Will she join in the fun? These are all questions burning in my mind. Pleeeassse continue. |
Reviewed By: manawolf [MediaMiner Member] On: February 23, 2003 05:01 CST
Comment/Review:
Characterization is a little shallow... I mean, Vegeta doesn't yell & scream ineffectually at every little thing. And I'm a stickler for IC Vegeta, seeing as how he's my fav. ^_^
BUT I loooove threesomes, so V/B/G? Thumbs up! |
Reviewed By: mischief maker [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2003 22:50 CST
Comment/Review:
Oh poor Gohan! His innocent mind has been corrupted! Chi Chi's gonna kill someone, a few people actually. heh heh. update soon. |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2003 21:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Caliente , hot , sizzling MMMMMMMMMM!! Cold shower ashower and a smoke is in order yup and I dont even smoke! WHEW!!! Ay Dios this was good I loved the trio thing even though we know veggie will never and I mean Never share Bulma especially with Goku but it was well done so thumbs way way up! UPDATE SOON!! cant wait for next chappy!
And yeah before I forget when is the next lemon going to be *hentai grinn*
Later :D
Later |
Reviewed By: Lauryn S. On: February 22, 2003 21:27 CST
Comment/Review:
What a way to go. i like it. great threesome. please more.
who cares about chichi. she had brough at herself. how could she not goku let getting any sex. i would not drop him from my bed. vegeta to not. no wonder bluma was having the best sex of her life. |
