| "Rest, Relaxation, and Realization" Reviews/Comments [ 50 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kawa-Misuterii [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2008 05:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
There's such a thing as too much discription, and you crossed that line. It's one thing to have a discriptive sentence, another to devote an entire paragraph to describing the sunrise. It's may seem well written, but it's boring and pointless for your readers. You did not truly grasp InuYasha's character at all. He would not have realized his true feelings for Kagome in one instant, and he certainly wouldn't have had the balls to approach her as you described. You give him too much credit. He's a young guy who would have been too morified at being caught peeping on Kagome to try and make his moved while she was pissed. Also, seeing as it was his first time, I highly doubt he would have possesed the confidence you portrayed, especially since you tried to emphasize two young people in love, not a married couple who've been doing that kind of thing for years. You did manage to grasp Kagome's character a little better, but you should realize that she is not the type to swear, even with her temper. Also, I highly doubt she would have allowed her first kiss to happen while she was butt naked. Purely wishful thinking on your part. All in all, it was a mediocre attempt, although you do have potential. Keep trying, perhaps with practice you'll get the hang of it.
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Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2008 05:47 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice story... enjoyed reading it... good job... great work... until next time...
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Reviewed By: animefreak492 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2006 00:40 CDT
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This was really good for a first fic. Great job.
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Reviewed By: inu/kag_forever On: August 27, 2005 07:50 CDT
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I loved it!
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Reviewed By: notzathros On: July 20, 2005 23:56 CDT
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Great lemon. Enjoyed it very much. Thanks.
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Reviewed By: Lady Orchid [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2005 18:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awwww!!!! that was so sweet. I really liked that.
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Title: Great story!
Reviewed By: inusho [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2005 08:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED YOUR STORY!!! It was so sweet and romantic. Keep writing Inuyasha and Kagome Fanfics. Your doing an excellent job.
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Title: GREAT story!
Reviewed By: InuandKagforever On: May 21, 2005 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was SUCH a good fic!!!!! I loved it! GO INUYASHA AND KAGOME LOVE FOREVER!!!!!!! WOO HOO! ^_^ PLEASE PLEASE write another Inuyasha and Kagome fic!!! There GREAT!!! Oh Yeah, Inuyasha and Kagome #1 BEST couple EVA!!!!! Woo Hoo Raise the Roof! Lol!!!! Enjoyed it lots! Great job! *remember Inuyasha and Kagome TOGETHER ALWAYS!!!!!* yeah what can i say i LOVE the couple! #1 fan here! (smile) LOL! Bye!
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Reviewed By: inuyasha's2hotmiko On: May 18, 2005 17:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was really sweet , romantic in inuyasha's way .ienjoyed the last part when you said nothing could make it more perfect other than inuyasha saying i love you
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Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2005 23:16 CDT
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it was by far better than my first try at fanfiction was. I have ups and downs as does any author and I think you were definately on an up when you wrote this. Good job. I hope you've continued to write for us. :0)
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Title: Rest, Relaxation, And Realization
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2005 19:46 CST
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I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: Sayorian On: November 02, 2004 16:51 CST
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wow your story is amazing
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Reviewed By: Hellkeeper [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2004 18:56 CST
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that was great
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Reviewed By: honeylover On: January 19, 2004 15:18 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awwww, continue please!!!
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Reviewed By: fangirlofiunyasha On: January 14, 2004 18:57 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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