Reviewed By: mir On: July 18, 2003 17:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Style of Writing: Not execptional but not bad either, the talk of the odds of them land on Haruka was kind of funny but actually distanted from the story for instance.
S&G: Didn't catch a Spelling mistake but doesn't mean there wasn't one, couple grammer errors. Nothing distrating good work.
O/C: Snape as Endymoin/Mamoru, hehehe, your evil. That part was great! Go you. Keep up the good work.
EF: try to stay on top of things a bit more and it wouldd be better but still a nice job.
OR: I like it. But it's too short to really judge. It needs to have more filling before it can rate higher here. It's a good start, but not yet a story. Turn it into a story! I'm sure you can manage it with the writing skill you demonstrated in this part. |
