| "Born to Be My Baby" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Battleaxe185 On: July 12, 2004 22:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
WOW!!! You know sooo much cool trivia! Marlboro Mediums... how great! The detail that you have put into this story (and the authors notes) have really stepped it up a notch, and helped bring it to life. The flashbacks are a little jerky, and hard to figure out, but I love it ;) OH! And I would love it if you could send me a site where they talked about Kenren/Tenpou being married... my email is trickpony@whoever.com and my aim is battleaxe185 :) Thanks for writing, and keep it up! I'd love to keep reading!!!
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Reviewed By: angelic_yokai On: October 14, 2003 17:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
gojyo and hakkai have to be my favorite pairing so thanks for making them all cute together, as for the review, the writing style shows good contiuity and decent grammar, the fight scenes (if you plan to do more) need a bit more fleshing out. very good story over all
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Reviewed By: kitsune-oni On: August 25, 2003 05:41 CDT
Comment/Review:
I don't understand Hakuryu/Hakkai either...lol...
Loved the second chappie and want lots more!
wish something exciting happened soon though... |
Reviewed By: kitsune-oni On: August 25, 2003 05:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
HEY! I liked this alot! A few typos though:
"fo" instead of "of" (first paragraph)
"lying their helpless" --> "lying there helpless"
"thrity minutes" --> "thirty minutes"
also, we normally say permanent ink
other than that, it was kakkoii!! and i feel happy now too (i wear glasses)...lol... wish there was some sanzo/goku... ^_^ but hakkai/gojyo is cool too!!!
and you like kou/doku? o_O thats one pairing that never even crossed my mind!!
XD
loved the first chappie |
Reviewed By: Kia On: April 19, 2003 22:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
Good start. *grins* Episode 22 is Devastation, 23 is Scapegoat.
A little jarring to switch between first and third person, and some errors, but generally it was ok.
Do continue! ^__^ |
Reviewed By: reichy On: March 24, 2003 08:01 CST
Comment/Review:
Lovely fiction!! Plz continue soon! |
