Reviewed By: icedstrawberri [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2003 14:55 CST
Comment/Review:
It's pretty good, nice plot. The only thing you need to work on are your tenses. Part of your story was "She fell to the ground." and another part would be "She falls to the ground." And..don't most people die instantly when they are shot in the head? *blink* |
