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Reviewed By: noodlemonster [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2009 13:52 CST
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i honestly don't see the point in this story. there's no real plot, so i'll assume this should be more of a hentai story. yet, it fails spectacularly at that. the sex scenes read like weird pubescent fantasies without the sex.
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Reviewed By: fanfic dude On: September 23, 2007 18:09 CDT
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if ranma goes for kiima(witch i say yes to) he should have wings that r big and powerful to make him more attractive. also the bird people can change to human form at will and look thesame just no wings.
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Reviewed By: fanfic dude On: September 23, 2007 18:08 CDT
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if ranma goes for kiima(witch i say yes to) he should have wings that r big and powerful to make him more attractive. also the can change to human form at will and look thesame just no wings.
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Reviewed By: fm waver On: September 23, 2007 18:01 CDT
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i think after hinako he should get lingling, longlong, pink, and link to go with shampoo for a five amazon set. also get the sailor moon, love hina, and azumanga Daioh girls too. for sailor moon ranma's mom replace's tuxedo mask with ranma as sailor moon's lover but tux boy dosen't like these development and tries to rape sailor moon and says he will make them all his slave's but ranma save her. for love hine ketiaro dosen't exsist, kanako is manager and a kind 1 ' and everyone is there. list: Naru Narusegawa, Mutsumi Otohime, Shinobu Maehara, Motoko Aoyama, Kaolla Su, Mitsune Konno, Haruka Urashima, Sarah McDougal, Kanako Urashima, Amalla Su(not married), Mei Narusegawa, Tsuruko Aoyama(not married), Nyamo Namo, and Moé-chan(like akane). same age as in the series and ranma take all listed. p.s. ranma can duplicat himself for training and pleasing his girls and remurge to retane all expirianse.
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Reviewed By: DarkJackel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2006 23:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The sebuction scene seems to be going rather well, can't wait for Ranma to flip the tables on Hinako. Seducing a seducer has its novelty but it probably shouldn't become is sole/main means of acquiring women. Next Ranma should pay off his debts of honor (i.e.: claim Ukyo next). Then, Genma's evils repaid, he can claim the other two, leaving the one who made his life more Hell for last. I hope Kasumi gets a naughty nurse outfit, maybe even be able to wear it in public.
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Reviewed By: DarkJackel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 27, 2006 23:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The sebuction scene seems to be going rather well, can't wait for Ranma to flip the tables on Hinako. Seducing a seducer has its novelty but it probably shouldn't become is sole/main means of acquiring women. Next Ranma should pay off his debts of honor (i.e.: claim Ukyo next). Then, Genma's evils repaid, he can claim the other two, leaving the one who made his life more Hell for last. I hope Kasumi gets a naughty nurse outfit, maybe even be able to wear it in public.
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Title: Nice
Reviewed By: iatnehfognik [MediaMiner Member] On: July 18, 2006 03:25 CDT
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Its good to see you didn't plan to abandon this harem fic...there aren't too much harem fics out there and most of them are unfinished or gotten repeatitive after a while like Table Turned..Its good to see your imagination band did not run low..keep it up Ho-Iatneh
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Title: You Going to finish?
Reviewed By: DrewB1442 On: May 15, 2006 17:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know it's a couple of years old, but it's a good story. I hope you will finish it.
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Reviewed By: HVulpes [MediaMiner Member] On: November 27, 2004 20:21 CST
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I made a fix of the first chapter with a copy of my fic from a better source. I hope this and my other works help. Thanks. Hvulpes
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Reviewed By: EvlMoogle On: November 18, 2004 19:59 CST
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For God's sake, learn to make paragraphs!
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Title: The Otaku
Reviewed By: Fionn On: November 16, 2004 21:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
The first chapter is all but impossible to read due to bad formatting and no paragraph breaks. Also there are a number of spelling mistakes and the actual content is rush, lacking in detail or just plain bland in places. Further more Ranma would not atomaticaly add Kodachi to a harem because she frigten him a little, she all the bad points of his other fiancee's and none of there good points. In adition to which her brother is a madman who wants to kill Ranma's male form and bed Ranma's female form, her father is a tropical Fruicake who often torments Ranma and other students in adition to being obssesed with shaveing Ranma's head.
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Reviewed By: sparkyaf On: November 12, 2004 13:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. Keep up the good work. This is definitly not your everyday fanfic. I'm really interested in how ukyo and shampoo are going to be affected. Keep writing please
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Reviewed By: def3PO On: October 26, 2004 22:41 CDT
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Great story.
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Title: Pagekeeper
Reviewed By: Thearon On: April 18, 2004 22:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Much better than chapter one. you have a very good storyline. Glad i kept up with your story. keep up the good work.
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Title: Pagekeeper
Reviewed By: Thearon On: April 18, 2004 21:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Now it was a very well written work. Except for the fact you didn't paragraph at all it almost came across as one long sentence. In your future works i suggest you space them out better. heres hoping you continue your worki it seems interesting so far.
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