| "Rituals" Reviews/Comments [ 26 ] |
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Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: June 29, 2003 16:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I really like how IC all the g-boys are. This chapter may not have been exciting but it was a good view of Heero's analyzing his fellow pilots. Which he would do at first opportunity. |
Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2003 02:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Odin is the name of the assasin who raised Heero. Heero was always referred to only as boy until given the code name Heero Yuy. |
Reviewed By: Enna Namo [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2003 03:29 CDT
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The chapter was realy good. Espeacially the part when they realise that they don't know nothing about going shopping and cooking. I wonder what they will do with the laundry.... lol |
Reviewed By: Ro On: June 10, 2003 23:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I found this fic very interesting, and although I do agree that the characters are a little OOC, the honest truth is that OOC is a very unique style of writing. We never find out what the characters are really like during the show, and we rarely get the chance to see them interact with oneanother, so really, who's to say that they're OOC at all? That's why it is important for fic writers, like yourself to bring them alive for the reader. I really enjoyed reading this and hope to see the next chapter soon. Until then, Happy Writings! |
Reviewed By: SailorinPink57 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 09, 2003 17:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
I LUV this!!! ^.^ Please keep going with this, it really is great writing. Oh!! and PLEASE fix chapter three!! I'm dying to read it!! |
Reviewed By: fanny On: June 09, 2003 14:28 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hello again!! this just keeps greting better and better. keep writting!!! dont take too long to update or you'll drive me insane!! bye |
Reviewed By: Airen On: June 05, 2003 18:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked this fic. I don't think Heero is too out of character. He has this detached tone that I think you've managed to capture in a first-person narrative pretty well. I hope you continue! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: fanny On: April 09, 2003 15:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
hi!! i thought that this was really good, and your fight scene wasnt that bad. for your first, it was pretty good!!!!!!!!!!!! anewayz, i think that this would make a good series, but maybe you should try updating the others first ._~ well, anewayz, i'll leave you so you can start writting again!!!!! byez |
Reviewed By: Dalamar's Mercy [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2003 07:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent. Like another reviewer said, I like this bit with the bad dream yet you didn't make it too sappy and emotional. I like Heero's perspective on the other pilots and I think you'd be a fool not to continue this. Please, do update and soon! |
Reviewed By: GoldenRat [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 17:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Very well written fic. A good first chapter. Can't wait for the story to evolve. It was kind of weird for Heero to volunteer for something, that doesn't really fit his character. |
Reviewed By: Clairol [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 07:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there. I really enjoyed this fic, I hope you continue it. It's a new outlook to the way the boy's function together and I loved the way it was from Heero's POV. One of the most antisocial of the pilots.
The description of Duo's nightmare at the end was great, no angsty tears or thrashing around in the bed...just the speeding up of the breathing. Somehow that just made it more effective.
Heero's laughter in the middle of the battle was also a well written little scene and I loved the way Duo reacted to it. Please keep this fic up, I'm waiting on tenterhooks for part 2 now. Ja ne. |
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