Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2003 20:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Decent lemon. Needs more detail, either in the story or the sex, or both.
Also, try using different quotation styles to differentiate between 'thoughts' and "spoken words". You've got them both as 'thoughts' right now, which is confusing to read. Unless everyone is telepathic after Third Impact? :) |
