| "That Is Bombay" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: Bisexual Pygmie [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2004 16:36 CST
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i've tried i think eight times to read this chapter, and i can't do it
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Reviewed By: bisexual pygmie [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2004 10:35 CST
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Omi's a PERVERT ha ha
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Reviewed By: Rei Eien [MediaMiner Member] On: January 30, 2004 07:50 CST
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Oh wow. This is getting great. Poor Omi. *nah* ^.~ I'm evil that way. But at least they are getting paid back to what they did to Schwarz. And the comment of Ran's hickey was great!
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Title: Wow
Reviewed By: Keitorin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2004 19:28 CST
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Let me start by saying this was a very enjoyable fic to read. I think it had a lot of great moments, and a lot of potential. But...yeah, the spelling was pretty bad. But the story was so good I stopped noticing after a while! If you need a beta-reader, e-mail me! Good job, keep writing, you've got talent!
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Reviewed By: Line On: April 24, 2003 14:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, I like your style of writing, it's simply good!some spelling mistakes made the story difficult to understand for me(I grew up in germany)I really enjoyed this fic and I'm hoping for soon continuation, so never stop, you do a very good job!!! |
Reviewed By: Talyssa On: April 19, 2003 18:30 CDT
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You need to do some checking, spelling and grammar wise. Or you should ask a friend to do it for you. For example, you used the word "ale" a lot. Its the same sound, but its actually spelled ail. Ale is a drink. ^^;; Don't take this as a flame or anything, because I don't think its your story thats bad. its just very distracting to try and read when you're constantly trying to figure out what different words might mean. I think a lot more people would read and review if you could get it fixed. |
Reviewed By: Slade Lane On: April 26, 2003 04:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
First off, I'd just like to say that I'm not very good at reviewing fanfiction. That said, I think this is a very well written and engaging story. I haven't been able to stop reading since I started hours ago, though I am severely sleep deprived ;). The grammar could be a bit better, but that is trivial when compared to the overall story. The characters are all interesting and well done, and the plot isn't full of holes, though that may seem the case at the beginning. I look forward to reading the next chapter, and I can only hope I don't have to wait too long. :) |
Reviewed By: Sarah On: April 10, 2003 07:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Schwarz is well done and creepy. Weiss developed interesting and thouroughly |
