| "Four on the floor" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Reviewed By: PyroFlivver On: December 23, 2003 17:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE A SEQUEL!!!!!!!! LOVED THE GOHAN AND GOTEN ACTION AND THEN WITH TORA AND TRUNKS AND THEN ALL FOUR OF THEM!!!!!!!!!!!AAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! I ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT!!!!!!! YEAH!!!!
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Reviewed By: I LUVV Vege On: November 10, 2003 18:02 EST
Comment/Review:
OMG! That was Sooooooo delicious!! WOOHOO! Great lemony action! You should SO make a sequel one-shot to this!! Ohhh yeah!!!
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Reviewed By: SonKikyo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2003 20:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Woohoo!!!!!!!! I just got done reading this at The Vault, but I had to review it here. OMFG, That was so fucking great. I can have this one too right? You should write more group sex, only have Veggie in it this time *drools in 50 buckets*
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Reviewed By: mizkittyuk@yahoo.com On: July 25, 2003 19:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!i could see it all in my mind....ooooh my lord how erotic!it was just oooooh,gohan and goten!brilliant idea and Tora and his chibi self..oooh brilliant too,omg,omg,omg,just...ooooh amazing!i loved it!PLLLEEAASEE WRITE MORE FOUR-SOMES WITH THEM CHARAS!PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE hehehehehehehehehehehehheheehehehehehehehehe,dont change one single damn fuckin thing about that story!if you do it will be a bloody crime!bwahahahahahahahahaha,me LOVED IT and it takes ALOT of good stuff to make me go THIS Hyper and damned happy an shaky an ect.LOOOL!iiiiiiiiiiiiiii LLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIITTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT! |
Reviewed By: nikkigurl99 On: April 16, 2003 21:19 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good fic. Very dirty and all. But you should rephrase some of it. Smut is good, but it's better when the flow is smooth. No offense. Maybe I'm spoiled by Firecracker and Xe. Please don't hate me. |
Reviewed By: reader101 On: April 16, 2003 11:08 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
The idea is interesting. But you depend on the shock value to carry my interest through the fic. That's too bad, because it had alot of potential. Maybe a more thorough beta reading would help. Honestly... it looks like something you slapped together in a few hours and ran a spell check through. |
Reviewed By: Piccolobond [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2003 16:42 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so delicious!SOOOO sexy and hot.Your a talent,keep writing!
LEMON........*drools*.......... |
Reviewed By: Konnioko On: April 13, 2003 14:36 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow!! There should be more of these!! So many more! Hint hint! That was fan-bloody-tastic! It doesn't come much hotter than that! (Excuse bad pun) Wow!! |
Reviewed By: Atrimis Legnacra On: April 12, 2003 18:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good, I enjoyed it very much... my only problem is you have a typo... and i would have never pictured future trunks, tora you called him, returning just to make a lover out of his younger self and Gohan, since when he first met gohan, gohan was just barely a teen...
Semantics aside, great story. |
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2003 21:08 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My mouth is opening and closing, making this strange popping sound... I'm completely dry... in my mouth, that is.
What a beautifully written, totally erotic, mind-numbing, fan-fucking-tastic fic, SSM! My kami, the way you wrote this, I could practically see everything that went on, and let me tell you, it was a b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l sight! :)
I need to get some icewater, as soon as my legs stop shaking... ;-) |
Reviewed By: SaintMe [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2003 10:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*ducks the objects whipped at her head from Raven, for not reviewing sooner*
That was absolutely DELICIOUS!! *licks lips* Hot damn... Who knew a demi four some could be that freaking SEXY!? er... well, I suppose it was a grand ole' idea, but to actually see it written out... oooh oooh oooooooh *whimper*
Me thinks your my hero for the day ^_^ This is gonna be stuck in my brain for the entire damn day... *wonders if her boss will send her home after she goes into a mad fit of giggles for no apparent reason*..... lol
write again soon!!! |
Reviewed By: manawolf [MediaMiner Member] On: April 11, 2003 01:16 EDT
Comment/Review:
-twitch twitch- Some leaps from reality - four people never cooperate flawlessly the first time together, it looks easier than it is - but it's more than granted for the abso-fucking-loutely fantastic descriptions.
Wow.
Quadruple wow, even. |
Reviewed By: GreenEyes On: April 10, 2003 22:28 EDT
Comment/Review:
*applauds*
O_O I need ice water now!! I LOVED it! Great job!!
Oooh sooo lemony....*drools* |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2003 20:13 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow that was one of the hottest yaoi group things I have ever read .Very well written and very very EROTIC!
Yumm!!!!!
Keep on writting! ok
Later!:) |
Reviewed By: Saiyajin_Raven69 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 10, 2003 19:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This has GOT TO BE the HOTTEST fic I have ever had the perverse pleasure of reading!! From the dirty dancing, all the way up to Goten's wicked final comment, the entire thing was so incredibly sexy!! Ok, maybe not when Goten ran to the bathroom, but still...
The individual pairs on the couch and in the hallway were absolutely DELICIOUS!! The mental picture I have of Tora and Trunks...GAH!! Those two are absolute perfection together. And I love the pairing of Gohan and Goten!! How sexy is THAT?
But the FOURSOME!! GAH!! I just LOVED how Tora took control, positioning all the bodies, and directing what should be happening! DAMN he's hot! The whole thing just blew me away! Excuse me while I go stand in front of the freezer to cool off!! |
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