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Title: Wow! ^_^
Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: September 23, 2003 20:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I just stumbled upon this wonderful gem while trying to find an interesting and unique type of AU. Your talent as a writer is phenomenal. Initially I wasn't sure if I would enjoy it. Usually when writing an AU, writers don't take the time to describe the world they are presenting. You've done an excellent job with that. Also you have also shown how Vegeta is very resourceful, on guard, and perceptive with his surroundings. Sometimes it's written how he can take care of himself, with him having advanced senses (sight, hearing, etc.) but it is rarely ever described where the reader can actually experience it for himself or herself. That was one thing that really captured my attention. It's nice to experience situations like that. It was also wonderful to see Vegeta trying to fit into society, trying to learn as much as he could about the humans; and that he doesn't know certain things that most writers would not think to consider (like what a stretcher is, or what "sir" means). And it is also nice to see the humans from his perspective where he is judging them by his criteria in such a way where it's not all shallow commentary. I also like how you show a common background that both Bulma and Vegeta share. I think it's an excellent way for them to relate or understand one another. In regular BV fics, it's often times not considered. But it is actually an important to show some commonality that can strengthen any sort of relationship that will develop. And by the way, I like your Bulma. She's assertive when she needs to be but without the annoyance. And the way you write Vegeta is superb. I don't know what you have planned for this story, I am very excited to find out, and so here is my addy: vegges_mate@yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2003 23:53 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love this fic. Please update quickly!! |
Reviewed By: Kegger007 On: June 30, 2003 19:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
Another exciting addition to the saga of Vegeta. I don't know much about the military either, so you won't get any complaints from me. I like seeing Vegeta trying to (without blowing up)integrate himself into the human society. I almost felt sorry (almost) when I read Segeant Azuma's comment about Vegeta. "Banana Eating Monkey" is not the best phrase to use with a saiya-jin. So now Vegeta has a job, I wonder how he is a teaching? I enjoyed the chapter, keep up the good work! |
Reviewed By: Laina On: June 22, 2003 01:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, please update, pritty please? |
Reviewed By: *StaR* On: June 16, 2003 02:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! I love this story! It's one of the best i've read, and I like stories with a certain amount of intelligence and entertainment rating. :)
The way you discribe humans out of Vegeta's point of view is so well thought and original :) I just love the human reaction on him and his frustration when he's trying to be like them, but actually doesn't want to at all :)
Do you have an update-list? (where you mail people who want to know wheter you've updated the story) Because I really don't like scrolling through all those low-class stories just to see if the good ones are already updated.
Keep writing!!!
Love, *StaR* |
Reviewed By: Kegger007 On: June 13, 2003 19:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
P.S. Thanks for translating your German story Angst. It was a very good read! |
Reviewed By: Kegger007 On: June 13, 2003 19:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
An excellent chapter. The first couple paragraphs surprised me! It was quite an interesting twist to characterize Mr. Briefs like that. He always seemed like such a nice old man, but I guess that needed to be changed for the purposes of the story! I liked the change, it was a good idea. Now the two have a common bond that they both have yet to realize. I can't wait to see how this develops further. Keep up the good work. |
Reviewed By: Kel On: June 12, 2003 07:52 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please continue this story!!! It was very interesting. I like how you portrayed the characters. Don't quit now!!!! |
Reviewed By: bise b On: May 13, 2003 20:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
hey! nice work, just..where is bulma?!!??!! i cant wait till she comes! have her in REALLY SOON! thanx..bye bye |
Reviewed By: Kegger007 On: May 13, 2003 20:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
Just finished chapter 3. Great chapter, the story seems to be progressing well! It's hard to believe that english is not your native language, as you command it better than some who have lived in English speaking countries all their lives. I don't find Vegeta to be OOC at all as I can understand that he has to be careful about snapping and blasting the humans. The last paragraph was quite humerous and made me laugh out loud. As for your note at the end, it doesn't really matter to me whether they are long chapters or short. If they are short, you get them quicker, and if they are long, you get a lot at once. But if I had to choose, I guess I would have to go with long chapters. I like sitting and reading for more than just five minutes. Keep up the good work, and I can;t wait for the final chapter of Beginning. |
Reviewed By: ursula On: May 12, 2003 22:24 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
your story is absolutely magnificent! i love the fact that you have taken in mind that vegeta is an alien and therefore he doesn't automatically know the languages and nuances of humans. also the scientific explanations you use for situations in the story are awesome and greatly appreciated. i have read so many stories where it was just generally assumed that all aliens spoke english, or that they could all breathe in any atmosphere. it drove me nuts! (i guess i'm just a little caught up in the physics of things.)
i haven't read a better story in a long time! thanks for writing it! |
Reviewed By: Kegger007 On: April 30, 2003 20:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
Decided to give this fic a read. Not that I am a fan of rape or yaoi, but your writing style is very good and your other fic gave me high expectations. I was not disappointed, and I find I like Vegeta's ever irritable personality. It seems he is going to have a challenge at hiding his annoyance and anger from the "pathetic inhabitants of Sol 3". Keep up the good work! |
Reviewed By: VampireGoddess On: April 30, 2003 16:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow...that was...wow....I really think you should continue this as soon as you have time because it is very well written. You are a very talented writer and it would be a shame if you didn't continue ^_^
So move yer ass dude! lol great job so far. I really like it. |
Reviewed By: lil rach On: April 24, 2003 00:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a great sotory! you're really good at writing. i can't wait to see what e thinks of bulma and how they fall in love. pleasse write more chapters i lve it!!! |
Reviewed By: YOSHINE On: April 17, 2003 13:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVED THIS CHAPTER IT ALMOST MADE ME CRY I LIKE TO HEAR HOW HE FALLS IN LOVE WITH BULMA SO KEEP ON WRITING |
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