| "love and blindness" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Reviewed By: inatasha [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2003 16:54 CST
Comment/Review:
yes to be truthful and honest I truly don't have a grasp on the english langue I do on japanese
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Reviewed By: ninja1 On: October 24, 2003 04:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WRITE MOREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: En Satsu Koku Ryuu Ha On: August 21, 2003 20:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
One word... Eh? Is this a joke? |
Reviewed By: Sanyin [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2003 09:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry, but this is completely incomprehensible. If you want to do a script/screenplay format, at least give readers some idea of what's going on. Dialogue is also indispensible in screenplay, and here, it's a hackneyed remix of Mary Sueing, the horrible American dub, and a that one fansub I had the misfortune of watching where Hiei and Kurama were mixed up.
The summary nearly blinded me and gave me a migraine, and all hopes for improvement were quashed upon clicking on the link. I'll write up reading this as morbid curiosity. This really is inexcusable. For God's sake, don't TELL people that you're going to Mary Sue in the summary (tasha is me)???
Clean up your grammar, and either go with prose or write, if not witty, at least understandable dialogue that somewhat resembles English. Strongly reccommend that you include action directions, and shave off your OCs. This is ridiculous.
Why make us suffer through it? |
Reviewed By: Pessed OFT On: August 10, 2003 05:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
What the FUCK!!!!!!!!! Some One Promised TriGun in This motha-Fucka |
Reviewed By: black_rose On: July 15, 2003 17:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
what the?????????????????i have no clue what the storyline is who's talking nothing.go learn how to write.cuz this sucks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!it doesn't even deserve this rating!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!improve!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Sailor Dark On: July 06, 2003 18:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
I agree I don't know who's speaking. No periods. I don't understand this. |
Reviewed By: Llewlyn [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2003 22:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was ridiculous. Have you no notion of grammar, or for that matter, do you have a simple grasp of the English language? To read the summary is a painful procedure, and it was with great regret that I wasted the energy to even click the link with the hope that the story inside was better. I don't even want to torment myself with the storyline; the summary gives me enough pain to last a week. Please, improve or stop posting. |
Reviewed By: hotohori [MediaMiner Member] On: June 26, 2003 16:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is a very good storie can't wait for more
later |
Reviewed By: Kiya [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2003 16:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was ok, kinda hard to understand certain parts, but it was good. |
