Reviewed By: Danaë [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2003 05:23 CST
Comment/Review:
Lovely written. Although these kinds of stories have been written a thousand times, I think you're doing it very well. As long as you don't follow all the stereotypic plotlines out there it's great. What you're writing looks like it's going to turn out to be very oríginal... AND VERY, VERY GOOD :) The first chapter(prologue) was kind of skock. Everything went a little too fast... When you looked back onm the day, maybe you should have inserted some thought of her(Usagi's) own. Like "I should have seen it coming." and the like. That would add to the tension and suspension... Overall, I like it^^
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