| "The Mislead Guest" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Luv4Bob [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2004 22:55 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent! Mwah hah hah! Bob(One of my pet tortoises & my personal muse) approves! hee. Only one thing wrong: you have alittle trouble with spelling, and an occasional problem with grammer. Bob and I would be happy to edit your chapters b4 you post them.
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Reviewed By: A New Hottness [MediaMiner Member] On: December 21, 2003 02:14 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HI SAKURA-CHAN, just thought I'll tell you how good you're donig w/ your story. I hope you update soon on both sites (ff.net, and mm.org.) I can't wait to see what happens. Heheehe, and can you review my newest story, and read it of course. Thanks and you still get a TEN, 10, DIEZ. YOU STILL GET A TENNNNNN!!!!!!!!!! JA NE!!!!!!!!!!! I just thought you should know that lol, JA NE once again!!!!
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Reviewed By: Danaë [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2003 15:48 CST
Comment/Review:
it's nice... you have a very special way of writing. I would advise you to revise the first two chapters. Maybe shorten some sentences. To have AN's as often asa you have is no good. It disturbs the reader. Put them as end- or beginning AN's instead (or with the use of an asterisk *). Using no protection... well, I guess it's just my view, but I don't like it... Becoming pregnant at that age.. well, whatever, it's a fanfic :) you've built up the tension very well. However, you're inconsistent at times. You use the name "Molly", and then, talking about her, speak of her as "Naru". It confuses the reader, even ones who are known to use them interchangeably. Why do you write in present tense? It can be hard to use this consistently, and it is not the way people are used to read stories... Could you please (or are you going to?) explain the relationship between Numa and Beryl further? Style of writing: different (maybe hard to do good if you're not experienced at writing) High enjoyment factor
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Title: HAPPY YET SAD
Reviewed By: Sakura Tsukino [MediaMiner Member] On: November 09, 2003 18:19 CST
Comment/Review:
Shakira and Silly Mina, Thanks for your nice reviews! I really appreciate it! I just wish more people will read & review. ^_^;;
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Reviewed By: A New Hottness [MediaMiner Member] On: October 16, 2003 18:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like your story. It's about time someone based a fic on the manga( That's actually pretty good). Keep up the good work. I LOVE KIRBY!!!!!!! AND I"M DAMN PROUD OF IT!!!! ;)
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Reviewed By: Silly Mina On: May 31, 2003 19:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cliffy much?! PLEASE CONTINUE! YOU ARE AN AWESOME WRITER! HURRY UP WITH CHAPTER 2! |
