Reviewed By: Masamune The Forgotten [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2003 01:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, first of all, it was extremely short. And theres absolutely no hook. Your prologue does NOT hook the reader, nor excite him. Make sure you have a hook in the prologue. If there is no prologue, then in the first chapter. Without this, anyone who does bother to read it wont feel like reading more of it.
And Kira for the name of a guy... what were you thinking? |
