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| "Pandora's Box" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: FFARG review
Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2005 20:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting this to FFARG. This seems to be a well-thought out story with a good style of writing and description. The problem I have, however, is that I'm a complete newbie to the Weiss Kreuz series, and as far as filling me in with all of the characters, you didn't do a real good job. I was left in the dark about the characters and this 'Pandora's Box'. 'THIS' could be change to italics so it would look more professional. Also--'ice and stone both melting in to his words', you have a good handle on metaphors and personification, but you gotta make it make sense. The ice melting I understand, but stone doesn't melt, does it? The story flowed nicely, but if I was filled in some more on what had happened and who all the characters really were, I probably could have gotten into it more. This is a good piece, no doubt about that, but it seems only to strike attention at fans of the series.
| Reviewed By: Vercaunna On: July 31, 2003 21:26 CDT
Comment/Review:
I liked the story, it flowed well but Im not to sure if I would make it one of my favorites. It could have been better but it was still good. |
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