| "Swimming" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Who knows? On: June 15, 2003 13:40 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style of writing is good but you need to work on spelling and grammar. I thought it was a great story and enjoyed reading it.
bye |
Reviewed By: kojiboshi [MediaMiner Member] On: June 15, 2003 11:31 CDT
Comment/Review:
Just to answer your question, I think you do a better job with Tai's POV than a more general POV wher you sometimes mix the 3rd and 1rst person in the same sentence (to speak of the same person).
Anyways, continue writing, it's so rare to read lemon about them this times...
Carine^^ |
Reviewed By: Me no mokugeki sha On: June 14, 2003 08:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good fic.....but please write one for Kouji and Takuya. PWEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
