| "Onegai Dame" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: AngelicMouseGirl On: July 01, 2003 04:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
Awww..that was a sad ending to the chappy...this fic has jou/seto angst every chappy.
HAI LEMON! Kudasai!! Leeemmmmoooonn!^_______^ PLEASE! I love this fic and I hope it turns out somewhat happy a least a little happy at the end. Kudasai! ARIGATO!!! UPDATE SUPER SOOOOOOOON PLEASE! Jaaaa! ^____~ |
Reviewed By: DARKstar On: June 28, 2003 08:11 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story ROCKS!!! PLEASE finish it up!!!
like i said before SETO/JEOY are the best yaoi couples ever!! |
Reviewed By: sprinket On: June 25, 2003 06:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
tat was so kewl but mabe not such a cliffhanger ending next time!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: ArrowSphere On: June 23, 2003 02:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
Awww....... just when i thought this was gonna be a happy chapter.... How could Kaiba do that to poor Jou! I'm glad you didn't make Honda a total jerk in this story though. I like Jou/Honda, but not as much as Jou/Seto, so I'm glad Honda was so accepting of the situation. I just wanna give Jou and Honda a hug! Their both getting an emotional beating here........ ^_^ |
Reviewed By: aznstarangel (ff.net) On: June 22, 2003 18:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style of writing is very good, though i might recommend some more descriptiveness. Changes in POV should be based on who u think would speak better in that scene. Like in "Irresistible", you could have kept Seto's POV when u changed it to "normal POV" but most of your POV changes are right on target. GOOD JOB! ^_^
Spelling and Grammar..... mostly, your spelling and grammar are very good, however, what bothered me a little was how you spelled "Amerika." From what i know and how we spell it in New York, "Amerika" is spelled with a "c." America.... but it doesn't matter as long as we know what you mean. ^_^
I'm not a "big" fan of Jou/Honda but it was good how u tied that in. Since i don't usually read Jou/Honda, I never read a fic like this before. Very original ^_^
I enjoyed this fic very much..... (maybe cuz right now i'm on a Seto/Jou fic reading frenzy) but anyway.... I really liked the idea and all the mushy scenes. (i'm a sucker for sap and fluff) ^_^
This fic was great. I hope you continue soon! |
Reviewed By: Split Persona-The Ones and Onlies [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2003 04:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
JC: That was great. You soooo have to keep going.
Kathrine: You have me waiting for a lemon and it didn't come. *Pouts* Put one in! We're all waiting for it.
JC: It's not like your story would be any worse without one, but hey...HELL YA WE WANT ONE!!!
Kathrine: I like how Seto and Jou expressed their feelings. It seems that fighting is their way of getting out how they feel towards one another.
JC: Yep, and you expressed it well.
Kathrine: And I applaud your humor, the 'getting caught in the act' scene was too puurrffect. I completely loved it.
JC: Yeah, now we have to know what happ...*Hears pounding coming from door a few feet away* Kat who's in your room?
Kathrine: That's where I've got my Kura. *Smirks proudly* Ryou doesn't even know he's missing.
JC: Now he does...
Kathrine: That's nothing. I saw Jennifer heading with Jou and Seto into her room. They're not coming back.
JC: *Sweatdrops* I give up. You both are insane. Now please just update the story soon. Bye. |
Reviewed By: Chi On: June 21, 2003 02:59 CDT
Comment/Review:
What a ridiculous plot. |
Reviewed By: Split Persona-The Ones and Onlies [MediaMiner Member] On: June 17, 2003 13:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
JC: I am so loving this story. it's sweet, angsty and love triangles.
Kathrine: I GOT MY LAP DANCE!!!! *Holds onto Bakura plushies until she squeezes all the stuffing out* Ooops... I'll just have to go get the real one. *Smirks evilly before sneaking off with duct tape, rope, whips, chains, and a few handcuffs in a duffel bag*
JC: I pity that poor tomb robber. Love the thought of Jou being a artist. I like to think of him having something hidden that was special about him. Now I can't wait for the next chapter and I know Kat will be here next time. She's like your best friend after Bakura gave her that lap dance. Just don't warn him that she's coming to keep him. Ryou might get upset. ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Oakland Peanuts On: June 16, 2003 23:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You go!!!!!!! Write more!!!!! |
Reviewed By: ArrowSphere On: June 15, 2003 23:39 CDT
Comment/Review:
I'm so glad you put up another chapter!!!!!! Poor Jou.. he's so confused, and Honda just has to go and make things worse. Can't wait to see what happens next! |
Reviewed By: AngelicMouseGirl On: June 15, 2003 22:58 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOoooooh sooooo SAD! ;_; *sob* Poor Seto... BAKA HONDA! BAAAAKKKKAAAA! I hope everything works out. PLEASE HAVE MORE SUPER SOON! ONEGAI!?! ^-^ ARIGATO! Ja ne! |
Reviewed By: Split Persona-The Ones and Onlies [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2003 23:50 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
JC: Wow, fast service.
Kathrine: Where's my lap dance?!
JC: Oh quit whining. This is getting good.
Kathrine: Yeah. I like how you made Honda. He's like a double-edged sword. He loves Jou, but lusts after him just as much, making it to where he can hurt him just as badly as he can heal the wounds made by Seto.
JC: Please update soon. We HAVE to know how this turns out.
Kathrine: I still wan my lap dance.
JC: Then go write it yourself.
Kathrine: *smirks* Good idea...I can add Jou to the mix.
JC: Oh brother... Anyway, keep writing! And I think Anzu's last name is either Mazaki, Mizaki, or Muzaki. Although I'm really going with Mizaki. *Shrugs* That probably doesn't help much. Oh well... |
Reviewed By: ArrowSphere On: June 14, 2003 14:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
That was so sad!!! *sniff* I know it's a one-shot, but you should really continue with this!! Onegai? ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Split Persona-The Ones and Onlies [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2003 15:27 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
JC: That was really sweet a depressing. Precisely what I was looking for today.
Kathrine: Eh...It wasn't TOO bad seeing as nothing happened save Seto breaking Jou's heart.
JC: You just wanna be here so that you can get a lap dance from Bakura.
Kathrine: And you don't want one from Yami, or maybe BOTH?
JC: I actually liked that story. I'm hoping she'll write more so we can know how all of this affected their normal lives in the long run.
Kathrine: What if Jou tries to commit suicide because of it and Seto finds out while he's in Amerika and feels like it's all his fault 'cause it it.
JC: You'd want Jou to actually die. I say let Seto rush back to Japan and beg for forgiveness.
Kathrine: But how would be find out?
JC: Jou could leave a note and Yugi could find it and everyone knows that he and Yami would find a way to contact Seto.
Kathrine: True. Still...I want a lap dance.
JC: What will I do with you? *Sighs* |
Reviewed By: Jou-pup On: June 18, 2003 09:43 CDT
Comment/Review:
^_^ awww I really like this story. It's cute and agnsty (a little) ^-^ Me thinks Jounouchi is playing with Kaiba. u_u He should submit to Seto though. I can't wait for the next chapter. Please hurry up and continue.
*puppy dog eyes*
You have been blessed by the god of bishounen, may your life be filled with cute guys. ^-^
Jou-pup |
