| "Verbesserung" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: :p On: June 14, 2003 23:24 CDT
Comment/Review:
wait a minute... isn't wo ai ni Chinese? |
Reviewed By: Amy the Yu On: January 05, 2003 23:58 CST
Comment/Review:
I found that kinda cute on account that it was Yohji that didn't seem to know what was coming. ^_^
First fic I believe where it was almost believable that Aya would react like that to sex, instead of swooning into the other's arms like he usually seems to do in fanfics. Plus, he does seem to be more dominating and there's no reason why Yohji always has to be seme like other fanfics seem to make him.
The only thing that bothered me was why did you use a Chinese phrase at the end? Japanese or English would have been more fitting since neither character is Chinese... O.O
PEACE OUT =) |
Reviewed By: plutosring On: October 13, 2002 13:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwww! thats sweet and endearing. nicely done. everything anyone does could use work, and no one's perfect, but you're gettin pretty close. loved it! |
Reviewed By: El Chupacabras [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2002 14:00 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
::thumbsup:: GREEEEAAAAAT STUFF :D~ |
