| "Spring Candy Kiss" Reviews/Comments [ 16 ] |
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Title: Spring Candy Kiss
Reviewed By: Dark_Knight^___^ On: July 15, 2005 00:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like it. Good pairing, really! I dont think i'll ever look at strawberry jam the same way again, though.... O_o Plz, update soon!
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Title: good job!
Reviewed By: KawaiiUsa On: June 09, 2005 20:44 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wai!!! *-* Two of my favorite characters made to create one of my favorite RARe pairings. good job and well done. Please please write more! It is very sweet.
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Reviewed By: AmberEyes On: August 13, 2004 16:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please write more. ;_; Please.
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Reviewed By: DemonandGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: April 22, 2004 19:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
I have'nt seen much Momiji/Hatori. It's sweet ^-^.
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Title: Chapter 2
Reviewed By: Sky High On: April 17, 2004 00:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sweeter still. Not only did this part have some ShigurexAyame (YAH!), but you had some delicious HatorixMomiji at the end, preluding to the next chapter's real intimicy. Thanks again and continue outdoing yourself. Can't wait for your next update. Ciao!
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Title: Chapter 1
Reviewed By: Sky High On: April 16, 2004 23:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I truely adore this story and this rare pairing. Thanks for breaking the mold and sharing it with us. I know, I am very grateful you decided to write this a HatorixMomiji fic, which happens to be your first lemon, because it gives me some yummy ideas and something I can review. The story is entertaining, erotic, and very sweet. I am confused with the relationship the two have. Are they actually boyfriends or going to be? There were also a couple of grammer and spelling errors, and minor translation problems. Some might not know what onigiri (riceball) is. Anyways, thanks again for the first part of what I know will be one of my fav FB fics. See ya soon!
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Reviewed By: jynnantonnix [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2004 12:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
UPDATE!!!!!! Please?
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Title: Well, I loved it.
Reviewed By: Lemon Writer Arashi On: April 01, 2004 19:05 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Huh. I thought it was great ^__^. And I love the pairings, highly origional, everyone else seems to be doing KyoxTohru or YukixTohru or some other pairing like that. Given, they can be origional too, but I do like this pairing ^^ I've been writing stories for four years now, hentai stories of course, and I absolutely love yours ^__^. Sure you have a few grammarical or spelling errors here and there, but seriously, no story is ever perfect when it comes to spelling and grammar. Hehe, and I don't think I'll ever look at strawberry jam the same way again ^^. Again, highly origional. I mean, sure, Jam is sticky, but not when it's being used in that way. You know, lubricant can be made out of a lot of things...my friend lubricated a yo-yo with butter and shoved it up another friend of hers' ass ^__^. (Sorry, I love that story ^^) Please update soon! I think I'm addicted....^___^
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Reviewed By: KIx (not signed in) On: April 01, 2004 14:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
WhooHoo...*pants self* lookin good chicka!
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Title: ^-^
Reviewed By: Miyahara Yuuki On: February 09, 2004 05:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
^-^ Nice nice nice!!! ^^ I can't wait for the next chappy~ ^^ Please do continue soon, ne? GAMBATTE!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: O___O sorry excuse for yaoi fic On: June 24, 2003 20:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
first off i agree that you have to work on your grammar but before that i'd suggest you get a crash course in gay sex or how to write about male/male sex and use some common sense! Jam =sticky=bad lubricant. No one in their right mind uses jam for lubricant heck even saliva would have been a better choice.
lastly this pairing sucks |
Reviewed By: NEMU On: June 24, 2003 06:43 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love you. I love this fic. It was wonderful and original. Keep it up. |
Reviewed By: Fake_Angel On: June 19, 2003 00:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
...Thank you... I think this is the first HatorixMomiji fic I've gotten to read even after months of searching...*sniffles* and I have you to thank. I liked it! Try to make your sex scenes a bit smoother, but otherwise you did great. Ja! |
Reviewed By: Akari ( ShigurexAyame@aol.com ) On: June 18, 2003 02:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
Very cute idea.
Not very well written though.
I'm assuming English isn't your first language. (please let me be right. I'd hate to think that the school system is THAT bad nowadays)
I suggest getting a beta reader, or maybe two.
Good ones, preferably.
The story has potential, it just needs a good deal of polishing.
Good luck. |
Reviewed By: DG-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: June 16, 2003 18:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
That ending was the best *snickers* I know I shouldn't be laughing but I am. Very well written I hope you continue it |
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