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| "Back to Kyoto" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: sweet!
Reviewed By: sakuracheery2 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2004 14:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sweet story!!! i think it is cool how u put your caracter in. one thing: try 2 improve ure spelling(all thouh, as U can see, i am not that good of a speller either! and i am in 7th grade!!!)
| Reviewed By: Yuki Onna On: June 18, 2003 15:00 CDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story would work much better if you could at least spell character names correctly. Your main errors are Saitou, Yahiko, Megumi, and Okubo. The misspelling leads me to believe that you have not seen much of the show or you do not understand it very well. Also, ask yourself: would the story work without your original character? She seems too much like a female version of Kenshin. Perhaps you should give her more individuality. However, this story has promise and I would like to see where it goes. So continue, but do try to improve upon the basic aspects. I apologize for sounding harsh. |
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