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Reviewed By: Lemony Fresh [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2004 18:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update damn you!!! i must read more! a year and a monther it's been since you've updated! you MUST!!! soon!!! T_T i wish to read more on vegeta + Kakarot! pleeeeease!!
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Reviewed By: jink On: November 04, 2003 22:37 CST
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I really enjoyed reading this fic! more please soon!!
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Reviewed By: Kahlan Nightwing [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2003 18:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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Hm...sorry, not here for the Piccolo/Bulma. Want Vegeta/Goku. Want Vegeta actually, but we can't have everything, eh? Well, I'm gonna wait for next chapter. They were mentioned, but I miss them...him. I don't actually miss Kakarott. And don't ask how I can read V/K and hate Kakarott. I love V, so it makes up for it. lol |
Reviewed By: Dark Kavora On: August 06, 2003 00:47 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
luved the last chapter! the chapters with goku and vegeta are always by far the best! i cant wait to see what happens between them next! write again soon |
Reviewed By: I Luv Vege [MediaMiner Member] On: August 01, 2003 06:21 CDT
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NICE! Ohh Gohan/Bura eh! Nice!! Yep.. make it happen!!! YAY!! Good work!! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Kewla [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2003 16:19 CDT
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Another great chapter...! (a few errors here and there, but nothing serious enough to take away from the story}
Isn't it strange how both Chichi and Yamcha ended up at the same resturant waiting on dates...that turned out to be noshows...perhaps it's *fate*. I must say, that I'ver never thought of Chichi and Yamcha as a couple...normally when I think of either of them, it has something to do with their slow, agonizing deaths...hahahaha!!! You are showing me a side of Yamcha that I've never seen...I like it...you know he may not be so bad...*thank you*!
Dr.Dave...he's gotta go!!! *Men*!!!(well some of them} So the woman he wants won't sleep with him, so he finds another that will...while still trying to get into Chichi pants as well...I wonder how long it's going to take Chichi to discover the good Doctor's betrayal? You've got me hoping Yamcha will be there to catch her and maybe take matters into his own hands...
Seems *daddy's* girl has a crush on Gohan or is it more then a cursh... I'm thinking...since Gohan seems to also have the hots for Bura...there could be something there...*nods head*...of course that assumming Vegeta doesn't kill Gohan when he found out...hahahahaha!!!
It does seems that the Saiyans and demi-Saiyans are attracted to one another..perhaps it's in their blood...? Hahahahaha!!!!
I love this story...it's sort of like one of those *soap operas*...you get to know all the characters and what's going on in their lifes...the best part is...you make it so interesting...
A mate for Son Pan...? Hmmmmm...the first and only one that came to mind when I read your question was...(drum roll please}...Uub! Why not... at least we know Goku wouldn't disapprove...hahahaha!!! If anyone else comes to mind I'll let you know...hahahaha!!!
By the way...loved the disclaimer...hahahaha!!!
I know I'm probably forget something, but if I am I'll just e-mail you...*smiles*
Thanks for going that extra mile...I for one appreciate your efforts...it's what makes a story lasting...
Untill next time
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Reviewed By: Kahlan Nightwing [MediaMiner Member] On: July 26, 2003 15:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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You go, girl! Yuri is the best. My advice, well, I too am going to be writing yuri soon, but in a different fandom. Dragonball Z just doesn't hold the opportunities something like, say Buffy does. Go look up Yuri images on something like google. You should be taken to a forum, done up in pink, in which people all over post pics of yuri. Some of them are very nice. As for yuri fiction--that's more difficult.
Anyways, beyond that, this is a great story. Please continue writing. Some of your phrases were too cliched and your grammar and spelling needs work, but it's nothing a beta couldn't catch. I really like that Vegeta thinks himself too dirty for Goku. And I like how you show that Goku is hurt with everyone thinking him stupid. Frankly, I'm neutral about ChiChi. It's Kakarott I dislike. I think Vegeta makes him a better Saiya-jin. lol |
Reviewed By: Star Spangle Mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2003 13:50 CDT
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I think you've showed each side to the complex character of ChiChi. Most people don't like to dive that deeply into some characters, Bravo for showing the different 'faces' of the woman most people tend to hate the most.
as always, can't wait for the next update! |
Reviewed By: Nanashi On: July 23, 2003 13:03 CDT
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Hayo!
This ficcy rocks! I love it!!
You use lot's of detail, I like it!
I really hope I won't have to wait to long for updates!!
~Steph~ |
Reviewed By: Kewla [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2003 03:28 CDT
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What can I say...?
I really can't stand Chichi, but it was a great chapter. She really is a good mother...she loves her sons dearly.
I must admit I was somewhat surprised that Chichi didn't go barging right in the bedroom when she realized what was going on. Instead she just put everything back and left quitely...*bows slightly to Chichi*... She doesn't seem to have a problem with Goten and Trunks relationship...that was a shocker!!! I wonder will she be as happy for Goku when he starts his *relationship* with her favorite...*cough*,*cough*...saiyan...hahahahaha!!!
You know Chichi wasn't grating on my nerves to badly, until she reprimanded her 40 year old son for his leniency with his daughter who is over 20 years old...and about nothing...a friend coming over to study for collage exams...PLEASE...!!! Gohan handle it very well...I was so proud of him...of course it surprised the hell out of Chichi...hahahaha!!! ( I could just see her face too) hahahahaha!!! About damn, time that boy(man) *talked back to his mother*... But tell me something...just curious...is there more to Pan and Bura's friendship then friendship...*shrugs shoulders*...you never know that sort of attraction does seem to run in their genes...hahahahaha!!!!
Gotta ran...it was a great chapter...even if I didn't get to see Vegeta, his name was mentioned several times...hahahahaha!!!!
One last thing...I must agree with you there is nothing wrong with a woman being hentai. Especially a grown wonam, I myself am proud of being hentai and don't care who knows it...it's part of who I am. In fact I am anxiously awaiting the hentai sections of this fic...hahahaha!!! I believe everyone has a little hentai in them...they just choose to deny it. Always be true to yourself...*smiles*
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Reviewed By: Kewla [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2003 16:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Why...? Why...did I rate this story a 10...because it's GREAT...!!!
I must say though...your food fetish is starting to concern me...hahhaha...but we'll get to that later...
Man! Goku's trying to spoil all Vegeta's fun...! I mean who wouldn't want to hear in graphic detail the how-to's of male saiyan pregnancies...especially at a wedding...hahahaha!!! And right after Goten and Trunks has informed everyone of their secret love relationship!!! Ah, come on...it would be so much fun...no one would ever forget this wedding...hahahaha!!! Besides, it might be more then Chichi could take...it might kill her...oh my wouldn't that be a shame...?
WOW...!!! Radditz and Nappa were lovers!!! Damn that Frieza...he destroyed so many lives... At last the secret is out...Nappa's death was planned...he missed his mate and wanted to join him. Vegeta wasn't just being a *cold heartless bastard*!!!
Hmmmm..is Vegeta in better shape then Goku...interesting...just for the record...Kakarott...short people can walk fast...care to race...hahahaha!!!!
I see Goku has got himself a job...why to go Goku...!!! Not to mention...it's *perfect*...teaching children martial arts. Yes, indeed the perfect job for the powerfull gentle Saiyan...he's so proud of himself and he should be...like anyone, he wants to share his happiness with another...someone he cares about...
You know sometimes I leave my bank book at home too...
Do we(you) have a thing about food...???? I'm sick just reading all the stuff they ate...hahaha!!! I like my waffles with lots of pecans,maple syrup then topped with hashbrowns...hmmmmm
Sometimes you just want to slap somebody...yeah, I figured those tellers weren't saying nice things about Goku...but you noticed how she changed her tune when she found out *who* he was and that he did actually have a great deal of money(as well as good looks)... It's really a shame and a sad truth, that there are people like that out there...haven't they ever heard.."don't judge a book by it's cover" or "judge a man untill you've walked a mile in his shoes...I hope Vegeta tears them a new as....(sorry...all most got carried away there} or at least put the fear of *Vegeta* in them...!!!!
Once again Goku has jumped to the wrong conclusions...now his happy day has turned into a sad day. Maybe with a good night's sleep he'll feel better tomorrow when they spar? Hopefully Vegeta will have time to stop by the bank before it closes...*evil smirk*
I love this story...I look forward to it every Wednesday!!!! I hope your muse like's the review...keep the muses happy and they keep writing...hahahaha!!!
Oh by the way...I did reread chapter 4...*smiles*
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Reviewed By: Dark Kavora On: July 16, 2003 00:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey i really luv this story, its great. I hope goku and vegeta get together soon. write again soon. |
Reviewed By: Star Spangle Mistress [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 14:19 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really in love with this story! The emotion that you've infused into it is wonderful!! I'll be waiting for the next chapter! |
Reviewed By: Blaze On: July 06, 2003 12:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's Me again! ^_^ ok i loved this chapter there getting better and better. and i agre you'd think vegeta would of caught on by now.... and people think gokus naive. anyway keep up the good work^_^ i'm going to go eat! it's all your fault.... |
Reviewed By: Moonshine587 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 04, 2003 11:23 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Still loving the fic. Can't wait for the next chapter, and also for the wedding! I bet it will be beatiful (with a few humorous incidents, I'm sure!).
Keep up the great writing, and update soon! |
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