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| "Opposites Do Attract" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: Green-ish On: July 04, 2003 14:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, I only read this because of one sentance in the summary:
"Remember, Trunks and Pan have basically switched places, so Trunks is a sweetie, and Pan's gonna be the player-girl."
As far as I can tell, having seen GT, that is how they are anyways - Pan is dating as much as her uncle, and Trunks blushes when around girls.
Anyways, work on your spacing, keep text one color, and don't forget - this story is *not* set on earth - make it *very* different.
I hope you don't take offence from this, this is honest critisism, meant to help you.
(On a lighter note, Goten/Marron all the way!) | Reviewed By: JuE_ThE_ChIcK [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2003 18:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I AGREE WITH HOPE_POE26, AN LIKE SHE SAID ITS ONLY A SUGGESTION. jUST BE MORE INTO DETAIL ALSO, BUT YOUR STORY IS GOOD FOR A START!!! OH AN CAN U WRITE IN BLACK COLOR FONT, THE COLOR KINDA HURTS MY EYES!!! | Reviewed By: JuE_ThE_ChIcK [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2003 18:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I AGREE WITH HOPE_POE26, AN LIKE SHE SAID ITS ONLY A SUGGESTION. jUST BE MORE INTO DETAIL ALSO, BUT YOUR STORY IS GOOD FOR A START!!! OH AN CAN U WRITE IN BLACK COLOR FONT, THE COLOR KINDA HURTS MY EYES!!! | Reviewed By: Hope_Poe26 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2003 00:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just thought I'd say that your story is good and you could grab me for a reader if you could - just a suggestion - put some spaces in between paragraphs. Also, put more action and show some more of Trunks and Pan's personality.
But like I said this is just a suggestion, don't take an evil side to me for stating my opinion. This is not a flamer. | Reviewed By: Sweet_Kagome [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2003 13:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is The best fanfiction yet. Something that shows alil about my personanaility. It's like bringoing some of my world onto a page of imagenation. It's totally awsome and i love your story. |
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