| "Been watching too many commercials..." Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: ss10009 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2006 14:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn this was a good story. I laughed some and the lemon was great! I can't wait to read part two!
|
Reviewed By: miyu On: July 20, 2003 00:09 CDT
Comment/Review:
whats going oN you have posted in 2 months, I guess this story is Over |
Reviewed By: Mistress Vejita On: July 06, 2003 13:07 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Come on Goku, you've never backed down from a challenge, NOW GIVE US WHAT YOU GOT!!! That goes for you too Gohan, you sexy man... he he ^_^ LOVE IT! |
Reviewed By: Sugar Lady On: June 25, 2003 20:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, that was absolutey excellent! Very good word use and love the lemons. They were your first? Very wonderful. You have talent. I'm a big b/v fan, so them being the main part was great. Show em' Veggie! Go Bulma-girl! Please don't do any swinger crap. It makes me sick to think that someone else could pleasure Bulma or Vegeta better than one another. It was vry funny too. Haha, Kakarot! Poor Gohan, but they got the hang of it later. The term watch and learn fits this quite well I would say. I think you should be a little more adventurous though, and add mroe positions, detail, and fore and afterplay. Of course b/v are up for round two. Heck, they'lll be up for round 10! I'm glad that the story isn't over and I can't wait for more! Please make the chaptrs longer. Vegeta's POV is a wonderful choice. Oh, and about the swinger thing, I meant that I don't like say, for example: Bulma and Goku together or Vegeta and Videl. Gohan and Vegeta: hell yeah! Bulma and Chichi: hell yeah again! I mean stuff like that. Strip teases are nice, locations, tricks, expieriments, oldies, erotic and sexy, hardcore, kinky--all that stuff is good to put in a lemon. So please update soon, and I'll be waiting and I hope oyu make more fics. You rock! |
Reviewed By: mouse On: June 25, 2003 07:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW.. I only wish I had the talent you do in writing... man.. that was good. Pleas more... need more.. lol can't you write one every few days, they are fairly short?
MORE!!!!
GREAT KEEP IT UP |
Reviewed By: mouse On: June 25, 2003 07:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT KEEP IT UP |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 22, 2003 15:04 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I laughed so hard there were tears in my eyes! |
Reviewed By: Majinoujivegeta On: June 20, 2003 18:32 CDT
Comment/Review:
Well that was interesting to say the least, i love it when Vegetas the prevert oh yea. continue and show more of your hentai thoughts. |
Reviewed By: Soul Reader On: June 20, 2003 16:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a pretty interesting fic so far. I had a good laugh at Videl's discomfort ^_~ |
Reviewed By: outtadaloop On: June 19, 2003 22:36 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL!! Smut rules in Vegeta's POV!!! So Goku and Chichi are going to join Bulma and Vegeta in the pool no? And yeah Gohan and Videl's reactions are priceless : ) Please say there'll be more of this soon! |
Reviewed By: manawolf [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2003 21:05 CDT
Comment/Review:
BWAAAHAAHAAAAAAW!
Totally priceless.
One nitpick, I'm afraid - if the entire thing is basically from Vegeta's perspective, at no time should he refer to Goku as "Goku." It ought to be "Kakkarot"s all the way through.
I'll be watching this one. Marvelous sense of humor! |
Reviewed By: NSBVEGETA [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2003 20:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
God this was so funny
*falls of the chair laughing!!*
PLEASEEE UPDATE SOONNN!
Goku left chichi wanting LOLOLOLOLOLLLLLLL!!
LATER! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH!!!Goku u pusyy!!! HAHAHAHAHA!!!! |
